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Never to be happy?
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Never to be happy? |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla 
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The past repeat's itself inside my own suicidal hell my heart shatters as the glass of my soul breaks upon the cement floor cold and hard distance stale damp like the eyes of the beholder my love has gone and shall never return. for a person like me can never truly be happy. pain is what im used to it is inflicted upon me everday like some kinda sick science project jab her more see how much she can take they smile a smug smirk as they touture me more with their posion they call love and "good intentions" Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Words are good can't say the same for the message Words are good Dave |
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shatteredsilver Member
since 2005-03-31
Posts 63middle of nowhere |
This is really powerful. Some of the line breaks seem to break up the flow - maybe this is what you want? Within the sound of silence... |
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Kristabell Senior Member
since 2003-11-29
Posts 678Portland, OR |
Nice examples and images. Lately, I have been feeling the same. We just have to hope, eh? Nice write! Kristabell |
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Foxyoasis Senior Member
since 2003-06-10
Posts 974Atlantic Beach,Fla |
thank's guys I dunno what type of poem stance i was trying to write ijust wrote what I was feeling Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me..... |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
You are writing how you feel, that's good enough. I like this. |
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