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On nights like this
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On nights like this |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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There’s no pardon in the River On nights like this On the nights that follow rains When his face becomes bloated Angry and red Even the birds keep their distance Daring not to perch too near And damned little metaphor As long as one doesn’t notice the discarded things And the misplaced things he gathers into himself Or the dead things The trees, felled for living too close, too long Then hurried off, feet first Their hands folded neatly on their chests On days like this The River doesn’t listen Filled, as he is, with his own importance And impatient to be wherever it is, he's going But, I’ll talk to him anyway Speaking in quiet ephemera, and gesturing Pointing to the places I’ve come unraveled And soon realize, my flailing goes unnoticed And my words, light as they are, settle Are swept up into his rushing core And drown |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
*Speaking in quiet ephemera, and gesturing Pointing to the places I’ve come unraveled And soon notice, my flailing goes unnoticed* oh really? LOL, not YOUR words, mon ami I love the way you put the river of life into words and you always get my attention |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed Perhaps, by the time it gets to the sea, your voice explodes....and the meaning of your words has been given to both the river and the sea. Oh, I liked this poem...I did! |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Maybe the thoughts drown, but then again maybe that's a good thing? I see it is river time again, may I have the link again Ed to watch the levels?  Great poem Yeti. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Great poem Ed..thanks.. Goldenrose. Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.) |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx All I see and hear is "that old man river he just keeps rolling along." Enjoyed |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"Speaking in quiet ephemera, and gesturing Pointing to the places I’ve come unraveled" damned little metaphor indeed I love you Ed.  |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Yes!! Very much enjoyed! For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
outstanding write! I love an impatient, self-centered river, and the visualization of words being swept into the middle and drowning is awesome here |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes, in many areas, rivers are rushing the deadwood... wonderful write, Wranx. Have been missing you - glad to see you home again. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
In the end there's a touch of John Haines in this. Good. |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Yes, rivers are like that, aren't they Brother? *smile* |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
A thought provoking write! Enjoyed! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
Definitely a dark and stormy night, Wranx! Sometimes it's hard to understand why things happen the way they do; maybe it IS because he's angry. Peace, Corinne |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good write  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
On days like this The River doesn’t listen Filled, as he is, with his own importance And impatient to be wherever it is, he's going But, I’ll talk to him anyway Speaking in quiet ephemera, and gesturing Pointing to the places I’ve come unraveled And soon realize, my flailing goes unnoticed And my words, light as they are, settle Are swept up into his rushing core And drown ~applause~ or perhaps an awed silence would be more fitting... this is superb!!! |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"felled for living too close, too long" hmm..that touches. Enjoyed very much. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
As a watcher of water, I was immersed in this fluid write. believe in what your heart feels... |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
enjoyed this~ My spirit will rise |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
fantastic writing Ed, much enjoyed. ~ |
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Aleta Member
since 2005-04-17
Posts 102Louisiana |
Swept up in the currents of your words, the source and strength running through my veins as the river channel carried this reader along.. Beautiful write, indeed! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
The surging of your words coursed through my body as I was pulled along by the raging current of your illustrious and impassioned ink. Big welcome back hug, Linda  |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
always a pleasure to read your words wranx |
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