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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state 
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Marked by a slight of wrist a sweeping hand movement gestures, pervasive silent gestures as if air could never transmit sound as if bodies alone had no presence their movements cracked gelid floes melted polar caps raised greenhouse emissions what would be our next condition part and parcel of social tradition contradictions of a slight of hand flutter of finger tips gestures blossom under moonlight their petals close in full daylight as if their bodies had no substance ... [This message has been edited by ecrivan (04-10-2005 02:48 AM).] |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Take these words further The substance is there but I feel you missed an aim Dave |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
amazing imagery |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
I like the way you left off, Martin, with a few ellipses... letting the reader take the beginning of your thoughts and wandering away with them on their own. Smiling with you. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
ecrivan Interesting read, enjoyed. |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
thank you all for commenting, I did well to extend the verse... |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
I like this Martin :-) Today the pond tomorrow the world |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
nice~ enjoyed~ My spirit will rise |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read  |
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