Open Poetry #35 |
the invitation edit |
Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
this is called a Shadorma, it's a Spanish form. 6 lines with a syllable count of 3/5/3/3/7/5, if anyone is interested in trying it. *EDIT* i was going for a pause effect with the comma, but i wasn't happy with where i had it. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ shadorma #1 the invitation bodyscape scribe; time written poetry in the well of her back a dark room invitation replied to, by tongue ©sdt'05 "i close my eyes and gather up the puddle of this life, one teaspoon at a time, into a bucket with holes" ~me an excerpt from "she still sees ugly" [This message has been edited by Snow (04-08-2005 11:50 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
cool! I think I'll pass on trying this though,. you've done it well |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Too complex for me...but i enjoyed... Goldenrose. Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.) |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
great job with the format and the context! "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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CastleGuard Senior Member
since 2003-04-30
Posts 760Alberta, Canada |
Nice. I must try that format... the acceptance satin scroll; its bare white incites tiptoed words scribe the well an acceptance of her call by poet’s tongue replied CG |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I like this very much... smooth and sensual... and yes... poetry can be written many ways. *S* Thank you for the repeat of the poem without the image... sometimes, my computer laughs in my face when I ask it to load pictures. LOL |
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Aleta Member
since 2005-04-17
Posts 102Louisiana |
So few words, so much said. Beautiful, evocative write. I read this before I was registered and was impressed, so much so ~ that I had to search for it and write a "thank you" for sharing this... |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Oh yeaaaahhhhh...... This I will do. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
Hello everyone Snow has requested that I leave a "thank you" note on her poetry to all that have read and replied. She is not ignoring anyone...sadly, she cannot post right now. Snow, you are missed. I do hope you will return soon. |
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Juju Member Elite
since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429In your dreams |
how neet. I actually think I have heard of it before. I can't remember where though Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Thanks for the info on the Shadorma, Snow. I've catalogued this one into my library so I can study this form for a later attempt! Beautiful piece of art here in all ways! ....jo |
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