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a jagged edge
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a jagged edge |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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A jagged edge across the chest scissors surgical unless an artery was cut we'll see "suction, nurse! The hemostats" did I say please? and wipe the sweat from off my brow cause I can't see with all this damned regret believe and I'll clip the clamp of it, as I breathe more easily whispering "some suction please" the wound's in need of suturing "suction, dammit, damn you-BREATHE" as I grip the disbelief of the loss of you in beads collecting on the brow of grief... why can't miracles be mine to share like petals of the rose tossed about so easily like incense rocking by the priest screaming for your soul? Tell him that I loved you more Tell him once upon we swore that God was not a pressing board begging our concede we bleed like the forehead under thorn a crowning of the all we've sworn sisters three and happiness and garlands rape the chalices sniffing at the oils we wore dancing in the green of field laughing at the storms. Tell him that I loved you more. |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
''Tell him that i loved you more tell him once upon we swore'' These lines reminded me of De Lamare...from the poem ''The Listeners''...enjoyed this read...thank you.. Goldenrose. Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.) |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
and wipe the sweat from off my brow cause I can't see with all this damned regret believe and I'll clip the clamp of it, as I breathe more easily whispering "some suction please" the wound's in need of suturing "suction, dammit, damn you-BREATHE" as I grip the disbelief of the loss of you in beads collecting on the brow of grief... ---------------------------- ... ... ... Tell him that I loved you more. she knew KA... she knew sisters just do |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
awww K, am crying with you. I am but one of three, and I feel this with you... even now, in your pain, you are so very beautiful.  K....I really want to care, |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
That's it, baby... you go and press that board right back... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"sisters three and happiness and garlands rape the chalices sniffing at the oils we wore dancing in the green of field laughing at the storms. Tell him that I loved you more." Crying with you and hugging you even tighter. Keep writing it out Ser... Love you lady~ |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed  |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
~gentle hugs~ |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
Crying your tears along with you, K... and hugging you tight... JM said it best... "She knew..." |
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Cloud 9 Senior Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 980Ca |
 May your sister be the butterfly you see on that beautiful rose to let you know she is there for you and is looking over you. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
cause I can't see with all this damned regret believe Believe this... she knew. Hearthugs. (and if this duplicates... my apologies... I responded... and don't know where my words went? *S*) |
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Kielo Senior Member
since 2002-02-11
Posts 1109 |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Tell him that I loved you more. She knew m'lady and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
You know I know, K. & love, jo |
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Kaoru
since 2003-06-07
Posts 3892where the wild flowers grow |
K - You have written such an amazingly strong piece here. I will not say that I completely understand what you're going through, but I can only imagine. Again, I am sorry for your loss, and I would like to keep this poem in my library. -hugs- |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 dang |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Serenity...Such raw emotion within your words. I am blessed too be able too read your words. You write the words of pain and loss like no other...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Karen, your hurt brings back that time of my special loved ones who have departed. It wasn't always pretty, but the "living" was. Your raw emotion is perfectly scored. Just wanted you to know, I'm thinking of you... sadie |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"and wipe the sweat from off my brow cause I can't see with all this damned regret" "Tell him that I loved you more Tell him once upon we swore that God was not a pressing board begging our concede" I can only imagine how hard it was to write this. Your words tear at the fabric of denial in all of us..."it won't happen to me"...but of course it does and it will. no regrets. As long as they know we loved them with everything that we had. love ya lady. |
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adagio Member
since 2005-03-19
Posts 449Marrero, La. |
too bad life does not provide shock absorbers but then how could we learn how properly to navigate our way through it? |
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