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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius

since 2001-03-19

Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2005-04-06 08:04 AM

wear your dawn shoes soothsin
dance for my windows
they are my eyes really
since you tied my hands
around your red dream color

pull the knob of my door
twist it back and forth
make the metal wet noise
in my hinge places
swing me back and forth

but don't use your hands
only your knees and thoughts
of bad things broken open
and left laughingly loved
wanting more than just undoing

but wanting to be justly undone
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dark

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

1 posted 2005-04-06 08:14 AM

"wanting more than just undoing

but wanting to be justly undone"

and that m'friend, is just the way it should be....lovely words this morning D~ Hi and Hugs.

I really want to care,
I want to feel something,
let me dig a little deeper
nah, still nothing~
my give a DAMN is busted. Jodee

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

2 posted 2005-04-06 08:27 AM

Lovely sounds, DS...

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

3 posted 2005-04-06 09:30 AM

but wanting to be justly undone

certainly hits home...this one line, makes the entire poem of life..justifiably perfect...thanks D. again, and again

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

4 posted 2005-04-06 09:35 AM

I don't get to respond as much as I used to..grand daughter and all..

but I still read!

"too bad ignorance isn't painful"
~Unknown~

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

5 posted 2005-04-06 01:18 PM

Oh Dark - mmmmmmmmm - let me shift your hinges, my door is open

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Indigo
Senior Member

since 2001-05-17

Posts 602

6 posted 2005-04-06 03:37 PM

when the muse inspires
the quill dips wet and travels
o'er her parchment skin.

Such seductive wordplay, D. How can one forget?

Ah... yesss. Inspiration is always there when you know where to look.

Indigo

soul drifter
Senior Member

since 2004-09-08

Posts 711
Colorado

7 posted 2005-04-07 07:52 AM

Very nice. So many lines I loved. Interesting title, too.

"Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

8 posted 2005-04-07 10:19 AM

nice

dawnsconstellation
New Member

since 2003-03-10

Posts 3

9 posted 2005-04-11 02:41 AM

mmmmm hmmmmmm

Lovin' this, ~DS~

Can't wait to read more of your magic....

~dawn~

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