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Foxyoasis
Senior Member

since 2003-06-10

Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

0 posted 2005-03-30 01:26 AM

What have I done
I may loose my one
and true love
malice intent is not
my true profession

Why must these pills
distort my mind so?
hasn't this diease
screwd my life up
as it is?

Am I not stronger then most
Am I not have the longing
that most women dream about?

Im so deep the ocean would be jealous

If this is what people say about
me why don't I belive it? why can't
I just be happy?

Self distructive ways I can bare no
more what do I do,Do I tell him or
do I just close the door and suffer
in silence.

For I rather do that then hurt him
or let him shed one tear on my behalf
for I am not worth a single tear on his
wonderfully kind face.

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

1 posted 2005-03-30 02:01 AM

I say go the honesty route...softly and slowly...James

netsky
Member

since 2005-03-29

Posts 148
Miami

2 posted 2005-03-30 02:12 AM

Is the reference to pills to indicate anti-depressant therapy or some related sort of long-term medication? So I take it.

I see a great deal of deep, meditative thought in this poem. There are a few small typos (well, two, anyway.. minor stuff)

The trap your protagonist is in is well expressed. I, too, wonder what is the best resolution. The one you chose is poetically beautiful. In real life, however, I'm not so sure that holding it in is the best course of action. Only your protagonist can really know.

thanks for a beautiful poem.

reid

Foxyoasis
Senior Member

since 2003-06-10

Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

3 posted 2005-03-30 02:13 AM

it wil burn in the end how am i ever to tell him when that is all he is used to it being done to him i rather die then hurt him

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....

Foxyoasis
Senior Member

since 2003-06-10

Posts 974
Atlantic Beach,Fla

4 posted 2005-03-30 02:15 AM

thank's guys to answr your question the pills im on is a steriod predizone for my corhns and it screws with my mind yea typos yes i typed it so fast i tried to correct some things lol but *sigh i dunno what to do i feel so bad and like im a bad bad person

Fool me once shame on you.....Fool me twice shame on me.....

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