Open Poetry #35 |
The Way of Things |
marcel Senior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 660az, usa |
The Way of Thingsā¦ How heavy this burden we carry While under the hot and cold glare of sky lit eyes, Searching alone in the forgotten dreams of others For the paths of true rights and honest wrongs; Sometimes I wonder if time knows its relevance, And if so... Could it still be impartial to the whispers of silence? We walk amongst one another as strangers But we all are branded with tattoo tears and blood Only seen when the moon dips And the sun rises to promises--- Promises we will one day embrace and understand; But not before those final three beats, When the heart at last will cease to be. Marcel |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
marcel Good thoughts, good write, enjoyed the read. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Marcel, the one force of your poem is that it be read...aloud...if only in a whisper. It must be read aloud. It is a very strong poem. Thank you. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
dang Keith you have really become a deep thinker and excellent at expressing it in your writing it's nice to watch you grow |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Somehow those final three beats ring eternal... Especially in the calm waters of those tears we wear... Incredibly lovely verse here Keith. TD |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
You should be proud of this deep and thought-provoking piece of writing that was expressed so poetically! Love & Light, EA |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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