Open Poetry #35 |
To Cascade the Falls of Chin |
miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
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Water splays and ricochets while brave drops cross brown shaftward path Ticklebrows to eyelids closed; Sensual the showered bath. One streamlet sways the winding trail Past slope of nose lofting cheek until another creek it meets Two dreamlets sway down unminded spill Converging to make just one; A jovial feeling the tingling feel Across the lips are reeling More gleamlets gather upon the chin Curling to mere point; Then once again, streamlets part To cascade the falls of chin. Sensual, the showered bath Tickle doused the eyelids close [This message has been edited by miscellanea (03-25-2005 07:40 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
misc'e... I felt this. Better yet, I know this... for it begins my day. How adroit... no... how understanding.... yes... this, is. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Wonderful!! I could actually feel the water droplets trickle. Well done! Hugs~Nancy For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Miscel How wonderful this made me feel...just lovely! Thank you. |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
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Sunshine, Ah, glad you could identify! I can't imagine a day without being energized or cradled and soothed by the miraculous drops of H2O! Truly a blessing we have! miscee Enchantress, Sure am glad you got a tickle or two from this! Thanks for your sparkling response. misce Martie, and...how your lovely response to my poem made me feel! Thank you! miscel [This message has been edited by miscellanea (03-25-2005 11:01 AM).] |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
stunning piece!! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
So cleansing! So energizing! I enjoyed your showering words so much that I am now off to have a shower even though I had a wonderful soak in a bubble bath earlier this evening! I love the uniqueness of your writes. EA |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
passing shadows, Ah... thanks. Glad you enjoyed! miscee Earth Angel, Rub a dub dub! Enjoy the water! I'm glad you enjoy the invented words--the creative word play originates from lack of vocabulary! (What is it--necessity is the mother of invention?) I find the thesaurus most helpful, but I guess I'm just a rule breaker at heart when it comes to "sound". It's just too darn fun to experiment! miscellanea |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
This is awesome! hugs, Chris "The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze." |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Sensual in the extreme -- I like this.... ....the view ain't bad either! ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Missy!!!??? This was marvelous...you take the reader by the hand and walk us into a fantasy world...to each his/her own Bravo!!!!!! |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
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Nightshade, For two years, I have wanted to write about the wonderful feeling water gives! I would be a fish if I could! Can you imagine it tickling through your gills? Ok...a little on the crazy side this morning! Thanks for reading and leaving your kind response. I'm glad the poem was meaningful to you. ~ miscellanea ~ Ratleader, Ummmm.... ok... How do I get out of this one? Truly, it was written in pure appreciation of the ever-changing magnetism of the innocent waterdrop! I don't really know the science of it, but I've always been fascinated by how water works. I could sit for hours in a car gazing at the windshield under a streetlight just watching how one drop is drawn to another, then slowly into a stream... When the mass is too great, again they part and the process begins again. ~ miscellanea ~ LeeJ, "Missy!!!??? This was marvelous...you take the reader by the hand and walk us into a fantasy world...to each his/her own" I've often wondered if this happened, rather doubting it. Thank you for voicing it. Hugs. ~miscee???!!!~ |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"Across the lips are reeling" uh huh...yes. I have the shower head that is like rain... "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
You just washed away the grime of the day and left me grinning... fantastic write! *S* |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
this leaves one with a beautiful and warm feeling. Lovely writing! |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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miscellanea Member Elite
since 2004-06-24
Posts 4060OH |
Susan, suthern, Gentle Spirit, and vandana, Just wanted to say thank you and wish you a happy Spring... miscellanea |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
thank you for a thoroughly enjoyable shower moment |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Very descriptive and well written, sis. Hope your Easter was filled with love. ....jo |
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Goodknight Member Elite
since 2002-06-15
Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
really well done - I just enjoyed the trickle and loved the read - Paul |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice...James |
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