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Lonely House Upon Windy Hill
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Lonely House Upon Windy Hill |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart 
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Upon the windy hill, the lonely house stood silently still, harsh winds begin to blow, rocking it forth, to and fro, Then came the frozen chill, darkness did it feel, the house tossed about, making rooms for doubt, suddenly boards began to crack, breaking the spineless back, moving it inside and out, parched and dry, drought, upon the window sill, the paint began to peel, all the color had faded, broken fragments, jaded, one by one, the boards fell, falling into hells well, all crumbled into a stack, house now, becomes a shack, ready to burn for firewood, an empty hole, is now, where it stood, one last flame burns, the only warmth to feel, no longer stands, the house upon windy hill.... We attract hearts by the qualities we display, we retain them by the qualities we possess.~Jean Baptiste Antoine Suard |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Beautiful, as well as your new picture...enjoyed the read...thank you for sharing |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
sad stuff  but I love it |
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EvocativeVerse2 Senior Member
since 2003-09-10
Posts 1279 |
I like this...reminds me of the house the fire department burnt down here a couple years ago. Now it is just a big empty lot! Borders the back of my house. One day I might buy it and turn it into a forest. That would be good I think. |
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A Romantic Heart Member Ascendant
since 1999-09-03
Posts 5496Forever In Your Heart |
Thanks for all of your replys..the house is representation of a relationship or a marriage that has failed....because relationships are built upon foundations of trust. With every year there s a new room added, to open the doors to explore more about eachother, to grow and to learn from one another.The flames are of passionate love..or passionate anger..fighting..until the house no longer stands..and the warmth of love is no longer felt.(Rooms for doubt..was intended) This was my inspiration and my thoughts while writing it...thanks! Love and hugs~ARH  We attract hearts by the qualities we display, we retain them by the qualities we possess.~Jean Baptiste Antoine Suard |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
Very good metaphor, and well written too..thank you... Goldenrose. Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.) |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Nice writing...James |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Such a good analogy, ARH. Such a sad poem. I hope a new house, a good strong brick one, is built in its place.  ...jo |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
excellant~ sad but beautiful~ know and understand what you said i lived in a house that was never allowed to become a home~ nor one's inside to become family~ thanks for sharing ` |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
A Romantic Heart Each flower lives and dies Where it grows and where lies. A wonderful write. |
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Thomas119gold Senior Member
since 2002-06-03
Posts 708Biloxi, MS (city by the sea) |
Truly a beautiful write! Words to the wise. Tom |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Metaphorically intriguing as well as narratively speaking! Ooo! It shivered me timbers! A great write on both levels! EA |
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