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Three Passion Moments [3 Waka]
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Three Passion Moments [3 Waka] |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
I. Be with me... if only for a moment; such shared ecstacy. Burst me into smithereens till dawn melts away the moon. II. You Intoxicate ... with sweet pleasures etched in words spinning wildly-- whirling, close, deep and burning; oh,crescent moon, be still! III. Speaking silent tongues, secret language of the heart beyond words- Oh, to touch and to be touched; dewdrops drip from lotus petals. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Paul, I think this is the first time I have seen the word smithereens used in a poem! It made me smile! |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Stand up and take a bow, Dear Wakian Poet! These wakas are outstanding. You have a gift for writing them. I thoroughly enjoyed the reading experience! I savoured and visualized each glorious line!  EA [This message has been edited by Earth Angel (03-22-2005 08:59 AM).] |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Paul, I think this is the first time I have seen the word smithereens used in a poem! It made me smile! Thank you Sunshine, ... I have seen it used in a wonderful book of translations: Zen Poetry: Let the Spring Breeze Enter Trans:Lucien Stryk. The image was so striking, that it stayed with me and popped up now.....[ Your smile is beautiful!] ~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Dear EA, Thank you, I am bowing to you in gratitude..... back ~P |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
thank you for sharing these moments of passion sure needed today |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Dear Dixie, It was my pleasure for sure...  |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
These blend so perfectly... and yet... each is magnificent in its own right... Excellent, beautiful write! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
You Intoxicate ... with sweet pleasures etched in words spinning wildly-- whirling, close, deep and burning; oh,crescent moon, be still! oh moon dance dance down the aisle in your big fat sombrero loves a blooming as spring shatters the zenman's window of composure |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Burst me into smithereens till dawn melts away the moon. Just wonderful. May I keep these in my library? Thankyou! hugs, Chris You are ice and fire. The touch of you burns my hands like snow. |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Thank you Chris, of course you can keep them back ~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Thank you ~Suthern, I appreciate your reading of the poems both separately and as a group ~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
You Intoxicate ... with sweet pleasures etched in words spinning wildly-- whirling, close, deep and burning; oh,crescent moon, be still! oh moon dance dance down the aisle in your big fat sombrero loves a blooming as spring shatters the zenman's window of composure WIndows shattered, fragments flying everywhere as the moon waxes full- blossoms swirl on sudden winds anarchy prevails...! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
Be with me... if only for a moment; such shared ecstacy. Burst me into smithereens till dawn melts away the moon. the moon shattering dawn melting the sky collapsing love is celebrated |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Be with me... if only for a moment; such shared ecstacy. Burst me into smithereens till dawn melts away the moon. the moon shattering dawn melting the sky collapsing love is celebrated The waxing moon burns through the ink sky moment-by-moment- love's frenzy intoxicates in sweet celebration |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Good morning! I just popped back in to read your rousing and wonderful wakas ~ yet again! I suppose I should save this glorious post!........DONE!  Linda |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Paul, this was like sitting on a deserted beach in the caribbean, feeling the tide so warmly walk towards with promises of nothing more then the quiet touch of azure waters How beautiful |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Enjoyed...James |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Good morning! I just popped back in to read your rousing and wonderful wakas ~ yet again Thank you Linda, you are so very kind. I am glad that you find these waka rousing.....warm wishes back~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Thank you Lee, I find your caribbean images very evocative and resonant with my feelings ~P |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Thank you James Michale, glad that you enjoyed ~P |
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