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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Ore My claim is running out of ore And little left within my store And though I break new ground each day My mind breaks down and goes astray Each shovel seems to have more weight And age has upped the cost of freight And thought I’m deeper in the core The tailings seem to show less ore This mine of mine is owned by one And I do all the work that’s done A life time full of dig and store To mine the gold of evermore Yet in the metaphor of time All my gold has turned to grime And in the rainbows treasures lust The rainbow stays the treasure dust So I have left a posted sign Give thought to how you mine your mine. |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Mr. T., you truly are an amazing poet, sage, and man. This is another one of your poetic gems that is going into my treasure trove of Sir Sonneteer's Sonnets!  The depth, realness and creativity of this illustrious write, truly makes this poem memorable. God bless you, you darling man! ~ and your freight is worth its weight in gold! Angel hugs and kisses, EA |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
No fool's gold here, Sy... each poem you pen is always a treasure!    |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Oh my .... wonderful wonderful how you capture the transient nature of our being... although you mine less each day, the quality of your gold shines ever more so brilliantly. Thank you, ~P |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
And you my friend are a golden nugget!  Wonderful words you gift us with this Monday morn. ~Morning hugs.........and tea, Nancy~ For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Wonderfully creative write Sy. I will be mindful. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Yet in the metaphor of time All my gold has turned to grime And in the rainbows treasures lust The rainbow stays the treasure dust So I have left a posted sign Give thought to how you mine your mine. ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ oh how I love how you mine you mind's rhyme.  and? do you see the reaction to your divine rhymes..... we KNOW treasure when we see it ... I keep telling ya...you are the pot of gold at the rainbows bend.  *ww*    one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Earth Angel, That comming from an Angel is Mighty-fine Jello. and I love jello. Sunshine You are the first one I see each morning. Hugs choshi A lovely comment, thank you. Nancy, Tea time already? scorpio Thank you my friend. JM, And you are the rainbow that stays. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sy "So I have left a posted sign Give thought to how you mine your mine." Very good advice! |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie Thank you sweet. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
love those last lines! well done |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
passing, Thank you sweet. |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Always a pleasure to read your work...especially aloud! Eric |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Sir Sy, might a thought be a though? Either way, you have captured a feeling that even I must humbly say that I do share it with you. And you have described it well. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ericc & Barry Thank you both my friends. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Yet in the metaphor of time All my gold has turned to grime You've been peeking at my life again, haven't you, my friend? *S* This is fantastic, Seymour... these lines spoke straight to my heart... but every one is magnificent. *S* |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
suthern You are more than a friend. |
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