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Greeneyes  
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind 
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I would ask you to sing, but your heart is full of stone you are the season of blue from your Sunday platform you sing of river&trains, of winters echo calling the faithful to kneel and pray and in your youthful memories recall velvet falling from a child's arm; a softness settling the floor -- walking across fields of daisies plucking the love me game from a smile and feel of warmth You, who gave your quiet love mixed in morning air ~~~ outside the window, the unreachable night covers the moon with black clouds, stretching over bare arms and painted oceans it was a Thursday and still no rain today I feel as weak as water I held my breath for a moment-- on thin black lines one casting the other in shadows Tonight I'll leave lavender on your pillow for you to inhale the beauty as you press your palms to the edge of night from the deep sea of the given with your smiling face pressed to stone This is my cathedral-- the rain is falling-- such a beautiful storm, first color on water And then we spoke of flowers seen only at night |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I promised myself I would never again miss a post from you. That's the best gift I could have given myself, Lauren. I loved the images of religious icon with nature (but then, blush, of course I would) a satisfying feastly read, that promises more, somehow. And should there be more, know that I won't miss it.  yer lovely |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"walking across fields of daisies plucking the love me game from a smile and feel of warmth You, who gave your quiet love mixed in morning air" Yes..you are lovely, as is this..beautiful. Hugs pretty lady~ For it was not into my ear you whispered |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Lauren Your words are a delight, so soft and lovingly placed.  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lauren, you amaze me with your imagery. So unique, but so very right. This is no exception... Thanx for sharing it. |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
a softness settling the floor -- walking across fields of daisies plucking the love me game from a smile and feel of warmth Love the soft settling of heart, even the love me game sounds inviting, but I know better now. To quote my mon, Jackson Browne, "when you see through loves illusions, there lies the danger" This is such a beautiful, soulful write, Lady Lauren. You move me, every time! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Strange as it seems, water is never weak... it may trickle, but it continues in its stubborness, to wear away... water is never weak, unless and until... it is taken up by a continual sucking sound... known only to nature, when it withers away, for water's roots only go so deep... and when it loses its main tap? Then most assuredly, still waters will run deep... Ah Lauren...it is so good to see you writing again... see how we expound on your own endeavors? |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
God I miss you when you are away, and so very grateful for when you are here.. damn, you move me Lady L....   |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Tonight I'll leave lavender on your pillow for you to inhale the beauty as you press your palms to the edge of night" thanks! LOL Such a beautiful image with this line, so fragrant and soft. |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
outside the window, the unreachable night covers the moon with black clouds, stretching over bare arms and painted oceans it was a Thursday and still no rain today I feel as weak as water I held my breath for a moment-- on thin black lines one casting the other in shadows Tonight I'll leave lavender on your pillow for you to inhale the beauty as you press your palms to the edge of night from the deep sea of the given with your smiling face pressed to stone This is my cathedral-- the rain is falling-- such a beautiful storm, first color on water ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ your poetry is not only to be read, but inhaled....and worshiped in me own catherals.  one drop, an ocean ... one seed, the forest ... one leaf, the wind ... |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I could quote every line as touching me awesome write! |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Yes...awesome indeed! Eric |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Heart hugsssss and love.....thank you for such tender replies.....  ~~*~~ |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
This is good . . . |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
NIce to read...James |
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Goldenrose Member Elite
since 2003-05-30
Posts 3665 |
This was a beautiful journey into the deep expressive mind you have and paint images we can all marvel at..thank you.. Goldenrose. Love comforteth like sunshine after rain. (William Shakespeare.) |
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soul drifter Senior Member
since 2004-09-08
Posts 711Colorado |
God, I've missed your words, Greeneyes. *sigh* So very beautiful; the imagery of this (and your other poems) I'll keep under my pillow at night. S'wonderful...s'marvelous... "Poets are all who love, who feel great truths, and tell them; and the truth of truths is love." --Philip James Bailey |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Lauren, this was amazing....a pleasure read... Hugs |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Written only as our Lauren can.  Hugs to you dear poetess. Chris "The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze." |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
agree with Karen... the way you write leaves me breathless. "too bad ignorance isn't painful" |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
good read |
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bslicker
since 2000-12-04
Posts 2321state of mind |
good write for a good read bernie A smile a day keeps the world in smile's. |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
This is a deeply inspiring write, dear Lauren, full of secret beauty. Love, Margherita |
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SimplyGold Senior Member
since 2002-07-10
Posts 1453 |
Wow, I am in awe. Beautiful. As Margherita has said "many hidden treasures here"! SG |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Good grief now how did I miss this gem? Absolute exquisite imagery Lauren as usual. Sure wish you and babygirlwlove would duet together, what a masterpiece that would be. Have a great day! |
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