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EvocativeVerse2
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since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

0 posted 2005-03-19 02:30 PM

Au revoir et l'adieu

You say you are a good christen,
That your strength is that you listen,
I beg to differ... Jezebel,
You mark not my tears that glisten.

A smile sometimes is a farewell—
—A kiss' the clang of a death knell,
So here's a smile and kiss for you,
Au revoir et l'adieu mon Michelle.

In cockcrow's we've yet to view,
Color me not in words untrue,
For to untruths, I'd not listen,
They breed feelings of déjà vu.

suthern

Member Seraphic

since 1999-07-29

Posts 20723
Louisiana

1 posted 2005-03-19 02:38 PM

A smile sometimes is a farewell—
—A kiss' the clang of a death knell,

How painfully true... Excellent write!!

Enchantress
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since 2001-08-14

Posts 35113
Canada eh.

2 posted 2005-03-19 04:11 PM

Well done Kevin.
I especially love the middle stanza.
Love the new pic!!
Hugs~Nancy

For it was not into my ear you whispered
But into my heart
It was not my lips you kissed
But my soul

Copperbell
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since 2003-11-08

Posts 956

3 posted 2005-03-19 08:06 PM

I like this!

passing shadows
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since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

4 posted 2005-03-19 08:08 PM

indeed

Seymour Tabin
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since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2005-03-19 08:34 PM

Evocative,
A well turned write. Well done

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

6 posted 2005-03-19 08:59 PM

hey answer your email ! love, S~

strong write, kevin.

"i close my eyes and gather up the puddle of this life, one teaspoon at a time, into a bucket with holes" ~me an excerpt from "she still sees ugly"

miscellanea
Member Elite

since 2004-06-24

Posts 4060
OH

7 posted 2005-03-19 09:09 PM

In cockcrow's we've yet to view,
Color me not in words untrue,
For to untruths, I'd not listen,
They breed feelings of déjà vu.

OUch! Love your poem, EV2! It's too long between the arrival of your poems.

miscellanea

Nightshade

Member Patricius

since 2001-08-31

Posts 13962
just out of reach

8 posted 2005-03-19 09:41 PM

Enjoyed this Kevin. Yes indeed. Chris

You are ice and fire. The touch of you burns my hands like snow.
~Amy Lowell~

Earth Angel
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since 2002-08-27

Posts 40215
Realms of Light

9 posted 2005-03-19 10:16 PM

Parting can be such sweet sorrow, ~ and it can also be the absolute pits. You poetically expressed the first scenario, Dear Poet.

EA
P.S. I wasn't always an "angel". When I was a teenager, our church had a halloween party for the "Young People". We were to dress in biblical costumes. I went as Jezebel! That caused quite a stir with the Elders! lol

TexUS
Member

since 2003-03-20

Posts 228

10 posted 2005-03-20 01:44 AM

Impressive and powerful.

Michelle_loves_Mike

Senior Member

since 2003-12-20

Posts 1189
Pennsylvania

11 posted 2005-03-20 05:34 AM

Ce poème est simplement grandiose. J'aime le reflux et le flux, ,,it se sent juste. Charmant écrit mon ami.

Michelle

EvocativeVerse2
Senior Member

since 2003-09-10

Posts 1279

12 posted 2005-03-20 06:41 AM

Thank-you everyone for the comments. I really am surprised this poem was received so well...especially with the line of French thrown into the middle of the verse. http://ets.freetranslation.com/ For those who would like to know exactly what the line says. And Michelle_loves_Mike thank-you for the wonderful comment. I had to cheat myself to translate your reply...it is a bit beyond my grade 7 French. Thank-you everyone.

Remember, if you're not part of the future, you're history!

froggy
Senior Member

since 2003-06-23

Posts 1893
Michigan

13 posted 2005-03-20 01:36 PM

I love it.

;-)

Within this heart you'll find love

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