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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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How odd to think this way That many millions of years ago tiny inarticulate creatures lived, swarming, in the oceans And that some of them the most ambitious, would crawl gasping, onto land to become, one far-flung day great and monstrous beauties Becoming, much, much later our furred and feathered forbearers and finally, perhaps not lastly, “us” Leaving the rest to dwell in primal soup living unchanged and immutable then dying soulless and uncounted turned to stone in Time’s gristmill How very odd indeed, to think that untold generations of simple life reproduced, ate, were eaten, chased, were chased, escaped or didn’t Only to be washed up on a beach at the base of a cliff, where in 1984, a girl in a white bikini danced barefoot on their bones |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Oh, I love the ending of this - great concept upon which to ponder, even if I am an alien from another planet and we settled this blue orb thousands of years ago - the whole evolution thing being a great conspiracy to delude current day man into forgetting us - hehe  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Krawdad Member Elite
since 2001-01-03
Posts 2597 |
Ya, loved the wrap. Nice twist. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
This is worth the price of admission.. and, btw....I read your poem that you gave to Susan...I thought it was great, so right on target....thanx Wranx |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling wide (reminds me of the kid who asked why apes were still apes, tho) we'll talk, bro.  But surely your evolution is revolution.  (gotta love the optimism) *poke* grin smooch |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
And some day, ours. John |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx A fanciful tale. Enjoyed |
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icebox Member Elite
since 2003-05-03
Posts 4383in the shadows |
Speaking as a fossil, it has been a long time since anyone in a bikini has danced on my bones. *grin* Great write! Thanks. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 You took me all the way, Wranx... and what a ride! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
how odd indeed |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoyed |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
A circle of life! Enjoyed!  |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Wonderful writing...thought provoking! |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Loved this!  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
(chuckling) Enjoyed this my friend... for it's underlying bit of perspective and the layers one can read into it... a please..always.. to read something new from you.. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
OK... so I have been back and read, then read again.. and again.... got to say dude... this one has some layers to it that I feel pretty deeply... |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Leaving the rest to dwell in primal soup living unchanged and immutable then dying soulless and uncounted turned to stone in Time’s gristmill well done...enjoyed |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Smiling here Bro, love the way you ended it. Wonderful writing from you m'dear. Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
::looks around for her white bikini top:: ::LOL:: wranx,from one old fossil soul, to another...damn, do I dig this... ::no pun intended::lol **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Eddie, irony at its best . . . This is THICK and geez, ya know it got me thinkin' just how far have we come? You always end with beauty, m'love. *smile* |
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