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Blue's Silence Still
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Blue's Silence Still |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
“hush” I said and put a finger to her lips as I took off my coat and placed it round her shoulders “The wind here can be cold” I told her Then let my eyes adjust to the darkness While I listened to the sounds far below Of utter silence That drowned out even my heartbeat And stifled breath as it was drawn With a soft hand “there are edges everywhere” I whispered to her ear “If we step off this one or that we will feel the sense of fall and know of Winter’s sins” She laughed easily then And with a dare in her eyes spoke bold “I do not fear the darkness or the cold” I could only grin Knowing how it felt To swallow raw obsidian mixed with fire And to find yourself lost in a landscape That defied eyes or ears to describe She moved closer and put a hand on my arm “You think me foolish?” “You think me brash?” “I think you hungry dear to taste of something new” I answered as I gazed at rising moon And wondered if the Lady Blue lay In her bed peaceful or if she raged In the throes of some wild storm Writhing her power and lust to move Against other men Who would travel her lengths And love her as I did She kissed me then And I lost myself in a vision of Turner’s Bend With its long slow curve against stone That hid sharp teeth just below the surface And would tear the heart out of canoes And of Men [This message has been edited by Cpat Hair (11-11-2004 10:14 AM).] |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
layers....I feel layers in this... and I love it's depth. Very well done Ron, good morning. The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
morning ma'am... layers...(chuckling) perhaps... perhaps.. but doubtful..I am not that clever..nor that smart... just drivel from my pen.. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
the drivel from your pen holds much in meaning Capt.... drivel....*chukles* yeah, RIGHT!! lmao.. The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
was thinking of this area when riding the curves to jalama sometimes the road is a river if the meds are working cool stuff sir |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Against other men Who would travel her lengths And love her as I did She kissed me then And I lost myself in a vision of Turner’s Bend With its long slow curve against stone That hid sharp teeth just below the surface And would tear the heart out of canoes And of Men ~*~ I am fairly sure I will never look at any river again in any other way. |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
DS... yeah the stretch of 69 just before construction begins..can remind me of a river too... meds working or not.. Your eyes Sir are always appreciated.. Ms Sunny one... we should never look at a river or a woman in the same way we did, or with expectations.. both will drown you ma'am... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Cpat, Your ending is superb. |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
If poems are tea, this is espresso....stark, hard, uplifting, memorable. Your imagery is consistently among the best that PIP produces, and your feel for atmosphere is something for us all to study. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
" And I lost myself in a vision of Turner’s Bend With its long slow curve against stone That hid sharp teeth just below the surface And would tear the heart out of canoes And of Men" Good to read you and the great ending verses you write again bud (and the stuff in between)...  |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
if this is dribble, may i crown you the dribble king? you wear humble with grace and style |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Sy.. glad you enjoyed the ending sir... I'm usually glad when I come to the ending of one of my own..and always think..it's about time this ended.. (chuckling) thank you sir for the eyes... and the words... Ratleader... you sir are far too kind... I just dabble..the real masters are here..and I read them.. thank you sir..for the read and the nice words.. Slacker... where you been? thought maybe you'd gotten so lazy that even getting to the computer was too much work for you... lol nice to see your "smiling???" mug.... Ms Inked... ma'am, you may dub me as you wish...I've certainly been called a lot worse than dribble king..lol.. as for grace..ma'am..I know nothing of grace.. that is a word that eludes me... I'm too hick... (chuckling) so more like shabby chic.... thank you ma'am.. for th eyes.. the words.. and the feel... |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
“there are edges everywhere” I whispered to her ear “If we step off this one or that we will feel the sense of fall and know of Winter’s sins” She laughed easily then And with a dare in her eyes spoke bold “I do not fear the darkness or the cold” I could only grin Knowing how it felt To swallow raw obsidian mixed with fire And to find yourself lost in a landscape That defied eyes or ears to describe ======================================= oh damn...................... we will feel the sense of fall and know of Winter’s sins To swallow raw obsidian mixed with fire (moth anthems baby...moth anthems) *sigh* |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
jm... my friend... it always pleases me to see you.. and your always too kind words touch me.. just like you always have with your heart... ((hugs)) as for anthems...lol.. you know they sometimes come out as a dirge.. |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
"She kissed me then And I lost myself in a vision of Turner’s Bend With its long slow curve against stone That hid sharp teeth just below the surface And would tear the heart out of canoes And of Men" Damn!....just damn. You sir are amazing! Now while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Nancy.. thank you ma'am... for the damn..lol.. and one that was followed by the word "you" |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
***indelible images braided into the souL..this is absolutely lovely, chief*** **babyblu** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
BBG... braided.. perhaps that is it in the end, that just like a river is braided from so many streams and trickles into something larger... I find the Lady Blue larger than my sense of reason and larger than sometimes even I know inside me... thanks for the eyes... and the word.. braided... made something click inside... now... I'll have to see what is behind that door too... |
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myheart Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 160lost in your eyes |
I answered as I gazed at rising moon And wondered if the Lady Blue lay In her bed peaceful or if she raged In the throes of some wild storm Writhing her power and lust to move Against other men Who would travel her lengths And love her as I did Wow, this brings up images in my mind that will linger there for some time to come! ~myheart~ Love is the poetry of the senses. ~Honoré de Balzac |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
Hmmmm .. hope the images don't disturb ma'am... or conjour ghost not meant to be awakened.. if it did.. my apologies.. |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
simply enjoying... *smiles* ~tier |
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