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The One ring
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The One ring |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia 
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I feel its heartbeat in my blood At night it calls my name I'm haunted by this one desire And I am not the same At first I felt its stirring pull Like songs upon the breeze It kept me young and gave me strength It made me feel at ease And then too soon its power grew It held me in its grasp And in the night I sweat and shake All I can do is gasp Its will grows stronger as mine fades It leads me to my doom What once began with purest joy Is shrouded now in gloom I trudge along weary and weak No strength to carry on Each bitter step a tread of pain Without a light or song My only hope destroy the ring And cast it in the fire My only prayer, I have the strength To overcome desire I hold the ring within my hand And look into the flame I know the thing that I should do But I am not the same My mind's made up, my fortune set I cannot do this thing Then gollum comes behind me and He boldly steals the ring He dances there upon the edge And falls down to his end At that moment my heart breaks I, to despair, descend Now clouds of grey fill up my life And every day's the same I want to breath, to live again But spend each day in shame Although the ring has been long gone I feel it in my mind Its heartbeat echoes in my blood And to all life I'm blind I wait the day when I’m released From torment and from shame I should be proud, should be so pleased But I am not the same. Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
This is so very well written and so poignantly beautiful....haunting. Well done gal. The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Oh, Lordie... you combine your fantastic rhyme and perfect rhythm with a story I love... I'm putty in your poetic hand! LOL You do know you're sending me back to read the books again, right?? LOL Excellent write, my friend... Doing what's right doesn't always lead to peace of mind, does it? *S* |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Enjoyable, each and every line.... what a story, written with perfect rhyme... |
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~DreamChild~ Senior Member
since 2001-04-23
Posts 544in your dreams |
cool theme from a favorite story! like... ~Express Yourself~ |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Ah, Frodo and Bilbo. The wee little Hobbitses of the Shire...I sure do love Tolkien, and really dig this cool write Kethry! |
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2dalimit Member Elite
since 2000-02-08
Posts 2228Mississippi coast |
...But I am not the same... Yes, once exposed, a memory / desire is almost always hard to resist. Excellent write. Thanks, Melton |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
WoW...held my attention throughout the whole poem...enjoyed~  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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Dr.Moose1 Member Elite
since 1999-09-05
Posts 3448Bewilderment , USA |
Kethry, Good stuff here. As with Tolkiens' work, there are parallels that can be drawn. Might poetry not substitute the "one ring"? For some of us I think it has, but, I've not yet come to point where Gollum has stolen any of mine, nor cast it into a volcano, yet, there's always hope. Doc |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah, girl... look at you glow...  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 wonderful! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Ahhh Lynne, this is an amazing write, the content, the flow... you! I wish I could write like this. adding to my library.  Maree  into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. ~Sarah McLachlan~ |
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