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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York 
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It stained the Rockies a kohl burnt sienna and flooded my throat with adjectives piled one to top the other Leaving the lines with shrunken verbs and me gasping for air. as it crawled into my mouth perching upon my tongue; To escape this gentle rise in my belly . . . butterflies. . . an overkill of beauty Yet, the only thing I recall feeling was this pen gripped between my fingers The scene dying before me . . . And rancid words strewn on paper discarded with each stroke as they bled easily purples and blues mixed with Aspen gold each cut off to lie silent muted by the fade scattered in the fall of rise my belly no longer filled I thought surprise is folding itself again |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Well, I clicked on this collaboration faster than the fluttering wings of a butterfly! I am so glad that you, Sue, took El Capitan up on his offer! You two make one rocking good duo! Your fine poetic inks created a masterpiece together! I knew if you two combined your talents we'd be in for a special treat!!!   Linda |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Special treat indeed!! I do hope there is more where this came from. So good to see you two duet! Must we beg for more? ~Hugs to you both~ Now while the leaves still dance on the wind |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"Leaving the lines with shrunken verbs and me gasping for air."  that's how I'm always leftafter reading either of you gasping, gratefully |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Nicely done and very much enjoyed~~ M |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
smiling* I've been waiting for this one to come from your pens... and I am so damn glad that it did....  The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Sue and Ron A wonderful duet!! |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Well, yanno? I actually see both flavors here. But done so well they are swirled, rather than layered. *smilin' atcha both* |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
I've been waiting for this duet...and well worth the wait! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
aye wranx said it best. excellent |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
eloquent, eloquent movement in this... outstanding collab... much love, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
It's about time. I felt the color beneath the skin... smiling wide  |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
thanks you all.. for the nice words.. Now I have to tell the truth here.. Sue began this piece.. had it written in outline and in form.. I edited a few rods here and there..added one or two.. but the beauty in this is hers... not mine.. Ed.. you have a good eye.. the blend is from editing rather than opening my own mouth and ruining what she began... thanks again all.. and Sue... it was a pleasure ma'am... now..take a bow would you? |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
God you to create one heck of a shock wave of words...wonderfully written and profoundly read...more please? |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
Very beautiful!! Both of you should take a bow!! believe in what your heart feels... |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Despite what the good Cpat says when it comes to his dueting with anyone, even the slightest tweak that comes from his pen is sure to enhance one's words... Sue, you gave him the grist... together, you made a poetic feast. Thank you both! |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Your voices blend so well, a magnificent collaboration. Greatly enjoyed and yes... it's about time. Maree  into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Yep, I see pieces of you both in this. You blend beautifully. A write definitely worth the wait. More? Please. Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows ...I am a girl of tears. |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
2 class acts, need i say more? |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Ron is insane, all of you know he painted this, I just provided the frame. (isnt that we he just said up there???) Thank you soo much everyone for reading, and for liking this. It means so much to me and Ron? Thank YOU . . . you have helped me to see through your eyes. *bowing gracefully* Please tip your hat, Sir. Thanks guys. |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
A beautiful blending, you two... Love this... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
AMAZING! ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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