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Death Does Not Live Here
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Death Does Not Live Here |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Death Does Not Live Here Gray wolves are nipping at my heels. My mind rolling through a valley of dark hills… The fields’ a ‘shamble lost to their frills. Ghosts are haunting, and screaming loud shrills… Every road I approach has a fork, of which one I pray to fulfill an end to this dizzying driving rain, and bone-freezing chill… Frantically racing toward a sunrise, staying clear the foothills, where the wolves live and thrive, and buzzards sharpen their skill… Adrenalin flowing freely and tingling the bottom of my feet, as her shadow covers me with an icy sheet… I’m free of movement and soon fall prey, sleep creeps past me as I slip to dismay… As my eyes strain not to close No strength to oppose… Slipping the fray I Drift away… Drifting, drifting away. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
I like the way the words themselves seemed to drift away off the page, matching the thoughts. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A dizzy top... JL, a very good write! |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome format and theme! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
beatifully written my poet friend. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
JL~ This is REALLY GOOD~ I am sooooooooo laughing at your Constructive Critique message~ LOVE IT ! *Huglets*  ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
Oh, I promise you that my critique is not going to hurt you! lol  In fact, it might even put a smile on your face! ~ I thought it was terrific! ~ in thought and form! Now please excuse me, I have the need to close my eyes and just drift away... EA |
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