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Exit Wounds |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City 
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give me the moment, sable ribbons sealed like sutures over the exhausted soul, the body hauls a new radiance in kilos, sews words full of holes, aching, just you, just waiting on the silverside of night, to suffer my innocence in no simple despair, so quickens the bullet pulse, as your tongue alludes to the alloy where flesh and silver forge their seam, and dream is but a stone's throw to oblivion, these valentine moments given in ripples, restless even in the quiet, cerulean shrug of shoulders strapped to holsters of steel, faith seals the skin on bruised crystal slabs wherein you run quick fingers, that blister sable over sutures to heal urgency in a silver flurry of exit wounds. Valentine Series 2004 copyright babygirLPress **Intoxicant to the SouL** [This message has been edited by babygirlwlove (10-22-2004 06:33 AM).] |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
whewwww!!!! You leave me speechless...and oh by the way...That my fellow poet, is quit an accomplishment!!! hehe Remarkable writing! |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
Your mind works in very mysterious ways gal....This is stronger than an acre of garlic....(That's Alabama lingo for a really great write).... |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
Lee J...thank you for checking this out and the smiles! love&light, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
Toe~ lol...ok...I've been writing poetry for years...and I don't think anyone has ever compared anything I've ever written to the potency of garlic...lol....you are a riot...! love you, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
babygirl ..... I don't understand, which is not unusual for me, but the sounds and rhythm are altogether fascinating. Well done. Bob |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
Bob... "babygirl ..... I don't understand, which is not unusual for me, but the sounds and rhythm are altogether fascinating. " Luckily...I am truly not trying to convince anyone of anything when I write...lol...Much of my poetry is layered with meanings...and how I feel it, may never be how anyone else will interpret it...which is fine...I only ask that when you do stop to read me...be open, and ride my vibe...which is just what you did...so thank you, love... I appreciate the time you take to travel these moments with me... love&so much light, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Ride your vibe - like that - and what a ride you give -  SusanHappiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
wow, what a ride you give LG.... I ENJOYED this much! The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Mysteria 
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I hate exit wounds  but loved your version of how they feel when felt with a tender heart. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Like LeeJ, I'm speechless. Thanks for sharing, by the way, you look exactly like someone I know from school....atleast from your picture you do. Coincidence, I guess.  ~Alli~ *:.AIM = Alli4000.:* My Journal |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Garlic? Hmmm, onion perhaps. Strong, savory, layered... Well, maybe not thin skinned..LOL |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
I was thinking after reading this the second time - no wonder I don't want to be anyone's valentine LOL. Is this from the Valentine series? |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
awesome write! |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
the silverside of night, I adore this line. beautiful writing Mari. |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
thank you all for stopping to read this.... Mysteria, I just noticed I forgot to tag it...this is indeed part of the Valentine Series.... thanks love... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
Wow !!! you have penned some great images in there Hope |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
thank you, Hope... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
the body hauls a new radiance in kilos, sews words full of holes, aching, just you, just waiting on the silverside of night, to suffer my innocence in no simple despair, very nice ma'am... you do have a way with words... |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
lol..C~ a cool blue pleasure to feel your eyes on me, here... ((thank you)) **babyblue** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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