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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
I rose quietly from the page to let my own eyes turn a distance upriver where the water broke grey yet over stones untouched by the sun, she still wore night's gown trimmed in lace that let my eyes almost see underneath the form of her curves as she moved Funny I thought this river has haunted me forever and the closer I get to her the further away she seems bending over I picked up the journal and walked away from her and the river to find the outcrop I knew would be there a short tabled boulder not quite broken from the bone There I turned the page and wrote: "My own name does not belong among stars or across the bowl of sky." then stopped and turned to a blank page to try again " Beneath the skin of words written on these pages lies the beat of my heart. Something I denied." and stopped closed the pages with care as I turned to walk back to her who moves through me and to her that would touch some part of me I was afraid to show When I touched her hair she turned and all I could do was grin then kiss her as I took her arm leading her back to a lazy morning touch of skin as I read to her what I had written before " Someday, I will understand perhaps that you are deeper than this still pool inside me and I will know what lies behind the silence of your eyes as they scan places I have seen so many times before with a wonderment of new and a sadness that I thought only I knew" My voice broke then When I felt her hand Reach for my chest And the heart she knew Lay within |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
your words bring a smile...and a need to say more....please.... The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
such a tender vulnerability in this...draws your reader in... and pray...you never let go... lol...damn, you the MAN... lol **babyblu** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
whewwww, standing ovation, lighting candles, all I can hold while clapping, and screaming BRAVO!!!! My oh my! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
" Someday, I will understand perhaps that you are deeper than this still pool inside me and I will know what lies behind the silence of your eyes as they scan places I have seen so many times before with a wonderment of new and a sadness that I thought only I knew" My voice broke then When I felt her hand Reach for my chest And the heart she knew Lay within" Reaching out, touching the screen with my own tears... this is pure poetry sir. Once again, I thank you. |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I respond in a hushed veil of wonder at the subtle beauty and tenderness of this write and the grace of your words - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
"When I felt her hand Reach for my chest And the heart she knew Lay within" Sometimes it's just a touch that becomes our undoing... and she knew all along where his heart was.. even when he didn't.  "cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
you render me speechless Sir. Bravo Bravo Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. |
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scorpio Member Ascendant
since 2002-10-02
Posts 5178right...there |
To see images in one's mind and then find the right blend of words to give them description is indeed a gift. Thank you for sharing your gift ron. believe in what your heart feels... |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I dont know where your inspiration is coming from, but I hope it continues. It's a pleasure to be reading you. ~smiling~ M |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
as I read to her what I had written before " Someday, I will understand perhaps that you are deeper than this still pool inside me and I will know what lies behind the silence of your eyes as they scan places I have seen so many times before with a wonderment of new and a sadness that I thought only I knew" My voice broke then When I felt her hand Reach for my chest And the heart she knew Lay within Oh, yessssssssssssssss. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Oh dang...dang dangdangdangdang... pull all the stops out... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ron This is so very touching!  |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
smiling from the shadows... beautiful |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
There I turned the page and wrote: "My own name does not belong among stars or across the bowl of sky." then stopped and turned to a blank page to try again " Beneath the skin of words written on these pages lies the beat of my heart. Something I denied." and stopped closed the pages with care as I turned to walk back to her who moves through me and to her that would touch some part of me I was afraid to show ~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~ " Someday, I will understand perhaps that you are deeper than this still pool inside me and I will know what lies behind the silence of your eyes as they scan places I have seen so many times before with a wonderment of new and a sadness that I thought only I knew" My voice broke then When I felt her hand Reach for my chest And the heart she knew Lay within =================================== she already knows....shes read your beautiful poetry.  *smiling at this title* *TY*  ~~~~~~~~ Poetry is emotion put into measure. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
OMG, this is exquisite. And now *sigh* you touch the very core of passion's existence...adeptly uncovering with the fine flourish of a passionate pen...so many once-well-hidden fantasies, dreams, desires. In other words, I'll be keepin this, thank you. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Verse within verse witin verse. Tell me, did you change your brand? Because I'll have what you're having. *smile* |
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Tiersdin Member Elite
since 2000-11-17
Posts 2364east coast |
strikes a cord today... cheers! or is it, tiers? ~  |
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myheart Member
since 2004-11-05
Posts 160lost in your eyes |
exquisite write. so much enjoyed. ~myheart~ |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
This makes me want to go find a pool of water and stick my finger in it, yanno? OMG, this was just so yummy. To quote bgwl - yup, You D'Man! |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Had to come back for another read, this one was so beautifully written.... |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
you never fail to impress...or p@## me off! why can't i #*$@&#* write like this...ahem..im okay..i'm in my happy place...breathe |
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