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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn 
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The Dead There’s a smugness about them After having divested themselves of everything earthly You can tell they know things That you and I, in our limited capacity, can only surmise And they’re not talking Their tongues are stilled behind taut painted lips And clenched teeth The windows of their eyes Are shuttered tight against my inquiries And I wonder if pulling aside the heavy drapes By lifting an eyelid would afford me a glimpse Of what might lie beyond Would I be looking into an empty parlor? Pale rectangles on the wall where pictures once hung The furniture, piled up and covered in sheets Dust settling on the chandelier, cobwebs in the corners Or at a Monet-like landscape? The Sun, shimmering on a lakeside picnic Smiling women reclining with wineglasses The men, scanning the horizon for sign of the ferry Or perhaps, just one lonely figure Walking away down a very straight path Tiny, and backlit in the immeasurable distance Between here and the sunset |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Yes, Ed, we can't help but wonder what lies beyond sometimes.... Your closing lines in this really stuck with me.... very well done sir.. The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
"Pale rectangles on the wall where pictures once hung The furniture, piled up and covered in sheets Dust settling on the chandelier, cobwebs in the corners Or at a Monet-like landscape?" nodding with the knowing yeti--I moved into such a place as yanno...and it is all different yet somehow he's still here sigh I go cook Lima beans hugs you |
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Cpat Hair
since 2001-06-05
Posts 11793 |
indeed.. or the hall of mirrors.. that only reflected you again and again..each time smaller... nicely done sir... always a pleasure to read you |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
You so well ponder the questions many ask. I, however, have already decided what I'm going to find. A house on a hill not far from a river where willow trees sway in the wind of freedom. Just over the hill, the mysterious sea and miles and miles of white sea sand. No harm in being prepared!  |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Some people paint picture with their poetry. You, Sir, paint panoramas... and I am always pleased to view the landscape...no matter the subject. |
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Huan Yi Member Ascendant
since 2004-10-12
Posts 6688Waukegan |
A Meeting In a dream I meet my dear friend. He has, I know, gone long and far, and yet he is the same for the dead are changeless. They grow no older. It is I who have changed, grown strange to what I was. Yet I, the changed one, ask: “How you been?” He grins and looks at me. “I been eating peaches off some mighty fine trees.” Wendell Berry |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Ed, this is awesome writing...you have penned precisely what even most of us might be thinking of "the dead"... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
wranx Excellent write, yet the mystery to me is the living. |
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brian sites Senior Member
since 2002-06-25
Posts 1475usa |
you are on the still quiet path assimilating into your own the laurels more, boy! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
I agree with Seymour on both counts, excellent writing |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
awesome  |
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Susan Caldwell Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348Florida |
hmmmm..chilling thoughts.  Well done."cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind" |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
since 2004-10-10
Posts 1180New York City |
wow...captivating read! indelible images fade onto the eyelids of the soul... great stuff, wranx... **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Ditto Sy & Karilea. An amazing write. Thank you. If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again. |
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choshi Senior Member
since 2004-01-01
Posts 1184New York |
Strong and poignant writing...very powerful ~P |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
WOW.....this is amazing! runs deep in thought..... ~~*~~ |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed Deeply thoughtful!  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I concur with all the accolades that both you and your poem have received, Sir Poet. And I also enjoyed the vision that Honeybunch presented! I am likewise prepared! lol  Love your writing! Your are in a league of your own! Linda |
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Mary Parry Junior Member
since 2004-10-12
Posts 45Felixstowe, England |
All will be revealed in the fullness of time. Amazing poetry. Do you give lessons? Mary |
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littlewing Member Rara Avis
since 2003-03-02
Posts 9655New York |
Eddie? I would like to think it is a figure in a Monet like landscape surrounded by those who love him . . . *smile* you make me WANT to write better. Thank you, (not a writer hmmpprrff!) |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Or at a Monet-like landscape? The Sun, shimmering on a lakeside picnic Smiling women reclining with wineglasses The men, scanning the horizon for sign of the ferry Wow, what a visual. Excellent... Brother Ed Another one for the library.  Mxx and I am haunted |
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pandonov Member
since 2003-10-03
Posts 478b/w conscience and insolence |
very, very nice |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
perhaps it is just like seeing Charlie Chaplin walking away in the sunset with Paulette Goddard one of his favorites, good stuff here |
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MARK V SHELDON Member Elite
since 2001-06-21
Posts 3015In a corporeal internship... |
Ed, you amaze me with your unique voice in each of your writings. You have some of the freshest images and thoughts I've had the pleasure of reading. Much respect... -MVS You CAN make a difference, but first you should learn how: http://educate-yourself.org/intro.shtml |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
since 2003-02-28
Posts 883 |
To close the gap between what you feel and how you convey a subject so undefined. Brilliant, just brilliant. wayne If nothing is something |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Maybe you should ask John Edwards  Seriously though, this is the one thing they can't get any real answers to, or at least ones I believe, and I am with you - I sure would like to know if goodbye is forever.Oh, nice write Yeti. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
now you know, for me, it's a starry starry night sky, a small outdoor cafe, with a vase of vibrant sunflowers and an artist to chat with in eternity |
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vlraynes Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-25
Posts 8229Somewhere... out there... |
You... are amazing... Love this, Ed... "When the power of love overcomes the love |
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