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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2004-10-31 06:10 PM

And so
what do I say to you

Look  The sun
just going down
below the trees

The lake’s waves
lapping against the shore

Ship lights
gliding out from Sault Saint Marie

How the crickets sing

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1 posted 2004-10-31 06:19 PM

You paint a beautiful scene of a place that
many wish to have seen,  and only dream of.

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Canada eh.
2 posted 2004-10-31 08:11 PM

My mother was from the Sault.
Michigan side..lovely.
well done.

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3 posted 2004-10-31 08:39 PM

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4 posted 2004-11-01 11:28 PM

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5 posted 2004-11-01 11:46 PM

I can actually envision myself being there. *sigh*


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woven by a poet's loom
6 posted 2004-11-02 12:30 PM

Need say no more.
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7 posted 2007-05-15 12:31 PM

Here goes the CBE, down....brush....up
three movements.  

enjoyed your paradise. beautiful and simple but it is dark.


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