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Natural Serenade
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Natural Serenade |
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Don_Juan Member
since 2004-04-08
Posts 252Far from where I am going 
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Natural Serenade Train whistles abound from half way down the track black smoke flows in intoxicating rhythms upward into a suffocating sky iron upon iron rings out in harmony with whistling melodies of a natural serenade flowing trough river veins and beating in bird hearts irridescent orange autumn sheddings lie suspended and cradled upon the back of the wind carried along the length of the track playing as silk strands across the chest of a barreling engine thunder claps burst forth in terrifying explosions shattering harmonious silence as rain replenishes the earth Haze lie as nets obscuring sight brakes scream sparks as iron withers stopping for an encore sernade within the fog delay nice use of muffin |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
DJ: You show a keen eye, and vivid sensuality as you mix your pallet of colors here... Yet, observations are different from feelings. As you become the colors that you paint, the flow of your words will take on the natural rhythm. Much promise. TD |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
irridescent orange autumn sheddings lie suspended and cradled upon the back of the wind carried along the length of the track playing as silk strands across the chest of a barreling engine Very beautiful scenery, painted with skill! Love, Margherita  |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I enjoyed the train ride! ~ and the view! Vivid imagery and a feast for the senses! A nice piece of writing, D_J! Love & Light, EA |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
what a scene! wow! |
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