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DavePage
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0 posted 2005-02-11 07:07 PM


Written for someone

Dave

Full of vibrant thoughts of a day
I lose those feelings I want to keep captured to dream happened in my mind
Ideas that were sparkling gold, words of magic, no feelings of something else I didn't do
I pick up a trusty book long serviced pages often vacant as I wish my brain was searching for words on missing pages that might have meant something
That had some meaning I can only dream of
But tomorrow is another day or night or space for a filling or feeling or
To dance on those movements
In dances of red and suits of
Movement in shadows of ice dried clouds
Moving starters to fire and fight at the gate
To hit that aim


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Margherita
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1 posted 2005-02-12 04:42 AM


You are caught up in a warm melody of love.
But the searching element is always there.
Love, Margherita

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2 posted 2005-02-12 06:23 AM


My brain enjoyed this one, Dave...
it's run-on style sounded very familiar
to my gray matter.

Thank you!

HopeS
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3 posted 2005-02-12 09:00 AM


Hey Dave , I am forever searching to find , simply because I have over active mind and besides I am a dreamer LOL

Hope

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4 posted 2005-02-12 01:32 PM


wonderful here
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5 posted 2005-02-12 03:31 PM


Great write Dave...enjoyed this!

~Alli~

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6 posted 2005-02-12 05:21 PM


Margherita

You are caught up in a warm melody of love.
But the searching element is always there.
Love, Margherita

I dont know that it was love.   Indicisive, angry, movement away to concentrate the mind unable to sleep and looking to quiet the mind to do so.

Dave



Sunshine


My brain enjoyed this one, Dave...
it's run-on style sounded very familiar
to my gray matter.

Thank you!

I do use a run-on style at times.   Full stops to me sometimes seem too final and it is almost lawyerish to leave the punctuation to the reader's imagination.

Dave

HopeS

Hey Dave , I am forever searching to find , simply because I have over active mind and besides I am a dreamer LOL

Hope

Gets a bit of a pain at times doesn't it.   I get overactive on words and I can visualise more than I can say.

Some people are eye people, some are ear people but it is recognised that there are two distinct types of input in the normal sense, since we shy away from touch although that depends on which country and habits you have.

Dave

passing shadows
wonderful here

Given that you are in Florida I can believe that.

Thanks Passing.

Dave

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Great write Dave...enjoyed this!

Thanks Alli - it is still very light writing for me though, I just dont seem able to do the heavy stuff now.

Dave


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7 posted 2005-02-12 08:28 PM


interesting as usuall makes you think


DavePage
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8 posted 2005-02-12 08:51 PM


Thanks Marsha

Words are often thoughts occuring for a moment of space.

dave

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