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Falling Down Drunk
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Falling Down Drunk |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296
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Chalice murmurs forever Shapes and sizes Long is the story of an awakening gesture The touch of echo in clay Can you see the silence? Feel its way New-fangled in your dreams Winking retreats to the smallest wishful philosophy Skipping & hop-scotch on marbled harmony Potential concord, to know the world Monolith of libraries grabbing the edge of life The edge of me and you Streaking swirls of meadow’s dew Arching frothless syllables, devotional blueprints Ever-green plunges the world Veils the hush of white laced snow The air of pureness…incense Wonder finding its way Baptizing moonlight song Lonely bittersweet music Silver and gold abloom Growing limbs of seasons Touching far away Easters Rising tides of what it means to be human Can you come to the still fence of sublime Amaryllis wanderer drifting me In quiet smiles of crystal ice Whisper of personality Gaslight Mardi Gras beading Whiskey drinking hymn of morning Fades into noon pearly sun Kneeling to a coming day The newness wrapped in love Laughing like a silent violin Lie silent in the happy bells of thought Invade the space of silence Where it’s much more then you realized It is a very daring music of the night |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
LeeJ You have stretched my imagination to the limit. Good morning sweet. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
lee j the gems you wash in your whipered oils are precious |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
“In quiet smiles of crystal ice Whisper of personality Gaslight Mardi Gras beading Whiskey drinking hymn of morning Fades into noon pearly sun” Great write Lee J. This verse brought back memories of my “Falling Down Drunk” days, when I was stationed in Grand Isle, Louisiana. Enjoyed this mucho! JL |
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The Jackal Member
since 1999-08-13
Posts 426Springfield, Massachusetts U.S.A |
Great write ,the last line is brilliant New lovers are nervous and tender, but smash everything. For the heart is an organ of fire |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Yes...I've been there a time or two! Great write and read, LeeJ.  ......jo |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Two areas of this poem are near word perfect.... here: "Ever-green plunges the world Veils the hush of white laced snow The air of pureness…incense" and here: "Amaryllis wanderer drifting me In quiet smiles of crystal ice Whisper of personality" I do like the messege and form of the rest, but these jumped off the page... enjoyed ___________ice ><> |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Growing limbs of seasons Touching far away Easters Rising tides of what it means to be human Can you come to the still fence of sublime Gosh, dear Lee! You are really a wonder with your words, such great deeply impressive imagery. Love, Margherita |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A panopoly of vision, here, and I see you even managed to squeeze in a bit of a phantom's touch...  ...good job! |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Wow! You do have a way with images... Impressive. |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Amazing write!  ~Alli~ *AIM = Alli4000* Journal! |
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