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inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

0 posted 2004-10-28 03:45 PM

This was not supposed to happen;

i vow i hadn't seen it coming

who'd ever think i could have taken
such a tumble

upon decent into such
farfetched melodrama?

but i leaped, a tonedeaf ballerina
to catch your empty promise of a sonnet,
forever etched into my marrow
you, the culprit to my heartborn hollow,

and how you spun me silly
in this frenzy

as i'm left fornlorn,
and humbly hobble

and watch the
leaves run free with wild abanndon
knowing soon
the wind will must follow,

saddened that the spring
must bury dandelions,
and autumn rises
on the dying beds of summer,

and despite it all,
within a wreath of faith
i still enshrine you,

though somber truths
write the epitaph of your fading aura,

and as the limber branches break
upon procession of this winter,
the trees can only shudder,

and sad to say
had i prior visions to this
most tragic climax of our affair's finale,
in shameless proclamation, with head held high
i will tell you,

i wouldn't change one thing about it;

i simply cannot help it

i still love you.

[This message has been edited by inkedgoddess (10-28-2004 07:09 PM).]

choshi
Senior Member

since 2004-01-01

Posts 1184
New York

1 posted 2004-10-28 04:04 PM

Wow!!!! Heart-rending, how you describe getting caught in this fall from grace...in-between feeling lost in love and in emptiness..

plunging deeper.
falling into the abyss:
emptiness....dreams.

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

2 posted 2004-10-28 04:15 PM

plunging deeper.
falling into the abyss:
emptiness....dreams.

full or empty
can love ever
keep its balance?

Margherita
Member Seraphic

since 2003-02-08

Posts 22236
Eternity

3 posted 2004-10-28 05:13 PM

saddened that the spring
must bury dandelions,
and autumn rises
on the dying beds of summer,

and despite it all,
within a wreath of faith
i still enshrine you,

though somber truths
write in epitaph of your fading aura,

Dear Michelle, I am impressed. It's perfect to continue to love somebody even when their "aura fades" ... it's not love that makes us suffer, it's attachment and the feeling of loss.

Love and hugs. Margherita

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

4 posted 2004-10-29 05:55 AM

This is beautiful and truly touched me.

Mxx

and I am haunted
by my illicit exquisite dream
but I can't really wake up
so I just drift in between

~ani difranco~

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

5 posted 2004-10-29 08:45 AM

"and as the limber branches break
upon procession of this winter,
the trees can only shudder"

Perfect!

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

6 posted 2004-10-29 08:53 AM

leaves run free with wild abanndon
knowing soon
the wind will must follow,

saddened that the spring
must bury dandelions,
and autumn rises
on the dying beds of summer,

and despite it all,
within a wreath of faith
i still enshrine you,

How utterly beautiful was this?
Outstanding write, thank you for sharing.

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

7 posted 2004-10-29 10:01 AM

i wouldn't change one thing about it;

i simply cannot help it

i still love you.
you and I, hold love to be very special~~
I can feel that from you, M

and I love dandelions too
Me

Cpat Hair

Member Patricius

since 2001-06-05

Posts 11793

8 posted 2004-10-29 01:31 PM

ah... well told ma'am... it's been a pleasure to read you and watch the way you've changed

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2004-10-30 02:05 AM

I know

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

10 posted 2004-10-30 03:49 AM

but i leaped, a tonedeaf ballerina
to catch your empty promise of a sonnet,
forever etched into my marrow
you, the culprit to my heartborn hollow,

and how you spun me silly
in this frenzy

I absolutely adore this! You are truly a golden goddess, in every sense of the word.

Don't you ever change a thing, goldielocks.

PassionandFun
Member

since 2003-07-30

Posts 60

11 posted 2004-11-09 05:01 PM

Another straight from the heart!

WhiteRose
Member Elite

since 2002-07-23

Posts 3208
somebody's dungeon

12 posted 2004-11-09 07:06 PM

You can real feel this one. It goes right to the heart.

JamesMichael
Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-16

Posts 33336
Kapolei, Hawaii, USA

13 posted 2004-11-10 06:27 PM

Lovely...James

stevebrklynnyc
Member

since 2004-01-04

Posts 292
GA, Camden

14 posted 2004-11-10 06:31 PM

The poem breaks a heart, lonely are we, the heart moves on.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

15 posted 2004-11-11 07:43 PM

God, Michele, I love this, you know why?
First, your writing is beautiful
Second, think of all the people you have loved and how each one of them made you who you are then think if none of that ever happened and just how truly sad you would be never knowing love.

I love many people still in many different ways. You are better for it. Truly.

dgvarner
Member Elite

since 2000-05-13

Posts 3552
High Springs, Florida

16 posted 2005-01-18 11:36 AM

I love this..the way you've put it all together is wonderful.....

hugs, g

"Everybody just wants to get high...sit and watch a perfect world go by..." (T.McGraw)

Pilgrimage
Member Elite

since 2001-12-04

Posts 3945
Texas, USA

17 posted 2005-01-18 11:43 AM

I love this one. I love the tonedeaf ballerina and I love the echo-rhymes throughout the piece.

Nan (Pilgrim variety)

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

18 posted 2005-01-18 03:25 PM

I saved this a long time ago, to read over and over again.

It deserves every good bump it gets, and you are just as lovely as ever, goldielocks~

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

19 posted 2005-01-18 04:50 PM

good read

mytuesdaywishes
Member

since 2003-09-05

Posts 254
a voice from the musicbox

20 posted 2005-01-18 05:11 PM

perfect. what a way to express unconditional love.

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

21 posted 2005-01-18 10:47 PM

Great write!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

22 posted 2005-01-18 10:54 PM

thanks for bringing this up and crying along

still crying myself over this badboy

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