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Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

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0 posted 2005-02-08 07:49 PM

I Don't Own The Horse
That Made This

I can't decide whether
I'm a shovel or a wheelbarrow.
Either way, I'm glazed with
something that isn't rainwater,
and it rusts me brown.

But the riders,
oh the riders look so fine.

Susan
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walking the surreal

1 posted 2005-02-08 07:51 PM

You made me smile - thanks

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

iliana
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2 posted 2005-02-08 07:53 PM

I'm not really sure if I understand this one, RatL.

.......jo

[This message has been edited by iliana (02-08-2005 11:40 PM).]

Larry C

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3 posted 2005-02-08 08:10 PM

Ed,
We might all have to take classes on this one. I'm not sure if you're cleaning a stall or merely reflecting?

If tears could build a stairway and memories a lane, I'd walk right up to heaven and bring you home again.

Greeneyes

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In Your Poetic Mind

4 posted 2005-02-08 10:27 PM

wonderfully said Sir!

~~*~~
My Shadow is the only one
that walks beside me
~~**~~

Red Dreams
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since 2005-01-09

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5 posted 2005-02-08 11:09 PM

haha, that's lovely.
proletariate humor

and with only a hint of bitterness. Well done, i have a tendancy to get carried away with such things and turn them into ranting diatribes, when a poem like this is so much more dignified.

iliana
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6 posted 2005-02-08 11:34 PM

dah........ I finally got it! I'm so slow! lol ......quite cynical but humorous.

......jo

Ratleader

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7 posted 2005-02-09 12:02 PM

William Carlos Williams is probably rolling in his grave, but I still won't apologize.....

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Saunni
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8 posted 2005-02-09 05:27 AM

It took me a few minutes to get this so I reread it. All I can say is your imagery is sensational even in such few words. This blew me away.

Sauni

Sauni:) I shall allow no man to belittle my soul by making
me hate him.
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Sunshine

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9 posted 2005-02-09 10:02 AM

http://www.poets.org/poems/poems.cfm?45442B7C000C07060171

AHA...

exponentially speaking
I think there’s no reason
for apologies…

Kudos…maybe…

GG
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10 posted 2005-02-09 10:10 AM

I watched an hour long documentary about that poem once. Mostly it just showed pictures of wet wheelbarrows, but it did have some very interesting things to say... and I'm not sure why I told you that, but I'm tired, so I don't mind going on about going on. And I believe you have no reason to apologize!

Always, Alyssa

He was a man of sorrows
...I am a girl of tears.

Marge Tindal

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Florida's Foreverly Shores

11 posted 2005-02-09 10:25 AM

Ed~
Gentle *smiles* at you~

Even gentler *hugs* ~

*Huglets*
~*Marge*~

~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost,
the spirit rejoices over what it has left.
- Sufi epigram <))><

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suthern

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12 posted 2005-02-09 10:33 AM

I love this, my friend... you've written a painful truth so many of us recognize... whatever we call ourselves. *S*

As for Mr. Williams... I think he'd appreciate the compliment of another poet finding inspiration in his words...so if his grave is disturbed, it's because he's applauding. *S*

passing shadows
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displaced

13 posted 2005-02-09 10:34 AM

well said

Huan Yi
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14 posted 2005-02-09 08:32 PM

So much
depends upon
the pane
glassed window

looking out
over
the withered meadow

pocked
with dead chickens

Martie

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15 posted 2005-02-10 02:06 PM

Ed

just a

Kazm
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16 posted 2005-02-12 06:42 PM

Your poetry is always too good for me but this one is scary and funny both.

I didn't do the thing you asked me to do on
Tuesday when I saw you. I agree and I will. Sorry to say it here but I want you to see sooner than you will get e-mail.

Kaz

Magnus

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17 posted 2005-02-12 07:14 PM

Interesting write Ed. and I think you have
done the inspiration justice in your twist
of the original...

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