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icebox
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in the shadows

0 posted 2005-02-03 02:05 PM



the ages of snow

the drifted crystalline doubts

the white lies of love


soul’s strained acceptance

sifted wait for awareness

pace of the tiger


shimmered awareness

the needing desert in bloom

love’s death in the rain

©2005 by icebox

© Copyright 2005 icebox - All Rights Reserved
Robert Frazier
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1 posted 2005-02-03 02:21 PM


powerful!

Rf

DavePage
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2 posted 2005-02-03 02:36 PM


I like it.

Dave

Martie
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3 posted 2005-02-03 05:11 PM


icebox

Time moves and it does require patients to keep life and love fresh.  Many fail, but also don't ever understand why.

The power of something short like this, comes in its meaningfullness.  Enjoyed!  

iliana
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4 posted 2005-02-07 05:59 PM


"the needing desert in bloom"
Reminds me of a tune
I heard
by Maurice Ravel --
So well I loved
the music sad, Pavanne
de Mortus Infantus,
I'd swell like
"the needing desert in bloom"
and my heart would feel
like abandoned love in rain.

Your words orchestrate much emotion, Mr. C.

serenity blaze
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5 posted 2005-02-07 06:11 PM


"soul’s strained acceptance

sifted wait for awareness

pace of the tiger"



"hey (hey) you (you) get offa my cloud!"
--the rolling stones



giggle

a patient soul's prilgrimage?

Now you know I know better than to pray for patience--no matter how immediate the need.



yer wonderful

passing shadows
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displaced
6 posted 2005-02-08 12:11 PM


love's death in the rain

*sigh*

Margherita
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7 posted 2005-02-08 12:29 PM



The sun shines on the icebox ... patiently every day, even when it rains.

Your poetry is always powerful!

Love, Margherita

Gentle Spirit
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8 posted 2005-02-08 12:38 PM


In so few words your message rings loudly.
Well done Sir.

LeeJ
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9 posted 2005-02-08 12:53 PM


boy, this packed a punch

white lies...now there's a reminder...
When I was growing up, my foster mom used to say, there are times when white lies are needed...I used to argue with her...say a lie is a lie and we'd really get into it.

Then, a time in my life came, during confussion, when I did lie, by some bad advice loved ones suggested...I to this day do not know what in the world could have possessed me?  But I did the wrong, and hurt someone dearly, perhaps even scaring him for life...

Can't take it back, but what I can do, is never do that again...and believe me, I won't.  Pretty howling painful mistake.

That is what this reminded me of...and I hope always and forever I am reminded of what never to do again.

Hugs and thank you

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