Open Poetry #34 |
The Innocence of Motion |
Martie
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The Innocence of Motion He was fast on skates, turning like the wind and knocking down the shyly paperback book I held; he found my eyes anyway, told me something with his cool that made me think of bad weather. Somewhere I must have known that the treacherous path he walked held the seed, for I saw the photo of the way his child would take the beauty from him and claim it with the eyes of a beloved animal and the skin of autumn leaking into the trees. I was only a vessel afterall. He was fast forward, not gradual as was my want, but hard of mouth as he listened to me sing my hymn; in the choir of my heart I watched the chill and pretended it was not a virus I could catch, certainly not one that would bed me to cold or so quickly bring life into my changing. A stone is thrown into the pool and becomes something more. That small seed of his nonchalance became a liquid web, like music shaped by reflection, the innocence of motion fell up not down and became Michelle. ------------ In loving memory of Michelle on her birthday, with gratitude to her father, wherever he is, and forgiveness. [This message has been edited by Martie (10-28-2004 12:59 AM).] |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
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Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
More than beautiful.... surpassingly lovely, and a haunting view of then through the eyes of now. ~~J |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
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You leave me speechless Ms Martie amazing you are. it's a Mxx and I am haunted |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
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Martie dear lady, hugs...and many good thoughts sent your way...wise woman you are...my oh my how you teach. Thank you for sharing a God given talent. Opening up many doors of light to others. Your words speak a kindness in your heart. |
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Cpat Hair
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hugs my friend... |
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babygirlwlove Senior Member
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Posts 1180New York City |
touching... love&light, **babygirL** **Intoxicant to the SouL** |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
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A stone is thrown into the pool and becomes something more. That small seed of his nonchalance became a liquid web, like music shaped by reflection, the innocence of motion fell up not down and became Michelle. ==================================== beautiful sweetie....both of you... and of that dedication- the mountain is smiling. heart-hugs Martie-girl |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
The poem mesmerized and touched... the dedication brought the tears. So very beautiful... both the poem... and the mother's love that never dims. |
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Sunshine
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A stone is thrown into the pool and becomes something more. That small seed of his nonchalance became a liquid web, like music shaped by reflection, the innocence of motion fell up not down and became Michelle. ~*~ Happy Birthday, Michelle. Warm hugs to your mother... |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
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Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Martie... |
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vandana
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Posts 10463USA |
nice read |
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icebox Member Elite
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Posts 4383in the shadows |
"A stone is thrown into the pool and becomes something more. " *smile* |
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Mysteria
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Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
he found my eyes anyway, told me something with his cool that made me think of bad weather Wow that reminded me of my own pending bad weather once. Martie, your unending love for her is a gift to us all, as this was absolutely beautiful. Forgiveness also is something we must do eventually if only for ourselves isn't it? |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I love the expression of this and the joy of making good out of pain - Susan Happiness isn't something that happens to you, it's created from within you. Joy is a state of mind. |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ This is soooooooooooo elegantly beautiful~ Your memories of Michelle are as fresh as the day the seed was planted ... and as warmly wonderful as the harvest~ How lovely you~ *Huglets* ~*Marge*~ ~*When the heart grieves over what it has lost, |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I guess that when I can read your words and see what you have painted....then I have accomplished a great feat. You paint such magical images, and the music flows over the reader as your harp strums a melody that one never forgets. Always keep her in your heart...and forgiveness is a blessing that will be a gift for all time. |
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wranx Member Elite
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Hugs and admiration... You write beauty. |
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kayjay Member Elite
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Your love and reverence for this lost child keeps her alive to you...and to us as well. This is beautiful, Martie. Ken Through rubble and trouble and dark of night |
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mysticpoe Senior Member
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Imagery, originality, flow and reader hold on for magic here. Just a great write. You penned this perfectly!! wayne If nothing is something |
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Goodknight Member Elite
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Posts 2386Ohio, USA |
I am in awe of how you write and what you say...whateve I say pales when compared to the awesomeness of your writing - Paul |
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Honeybunch Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-29
Posts 7115South Africa |
Martie - There's nothing I can say that hasn't been said already except perhaps how lucky you are to have been the one chosen to remember. |
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GG Member Elite
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Posts 3532Lost in thought |
I don't even know what to say... Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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dgvarner Member Elite
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Posts 3552High Springs, Florida |
much enjoyed reading this one..neat write... hugs, g "Everybody just wants to get high...sit and watch a perfect world go by..." (T.McGraw) |
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ice Member Elite
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Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Knocked senseless by the impact of these words, I am unable to speak any but one... Beautiful! Grasping for another I come up with...Passion!......resting a while, another Applause! _________ice/ford ><> |
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*Alli4000*
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Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
*speechless* ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
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Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
speechless...hug |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
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oh... speechless |
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