Open Poetry #34 |
Tweener Wiener |
bbent Senior Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 521Alaska |
Tweener Wiener The slow dance Has come to an end, The moment over Your running again, Tired scared and lonely In need of a friend, Another baptism In the well of beginnings. Painless healing The face of a clown, Even fairies Must sometimes touch ground, Left feeling ill A puppet of the renoun, Who’s aim it is To cull the worthless and disgusting Such is the plight Of the caring and the trusting, Destined to exist and die alone. Live like it's your last day... |
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ice Member Elite
since 2003-05-17
Posts 3404Pennsylvania |
Strong poetry....love it... The ending has much merit, bb...and is thought provoking... Is it better to die alone or with someone who does not love you? I am a bit puzzled by the title...? But enjoyed the poem. __________ice ><> |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
yes, very strong poetry...and well written, thought out... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Culling...a novel way to view it. Well done, Ray, layers of emotion skillfully revealed. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Such is the plight Of the caring and the trusting, Destined to exist and die alone. scary thought to me~~ M |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
understanding this |
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bbent Senior Member
since 2001-01-07
Posts 521Alaska |
Thanks to all of you...appreciate your kind thoughts. Live like it's your last day... |
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