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Paper Boy
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0 posted 2005-01-30 05:35 PM


This assignment is about the book "The Lion, the Witch, and the Wardrobe"


Peter and Aslan were on the hill,
Lucy had surely eaten her fill.
Then there was the call of a horn,
And at that moment a trouble was born.
Susan was being chased by Ulf,
And at that, Peter was off in a FLULF!
Peter took a swish at Sir Fenris,
Which put the wolf in a state of madniss.
Then Peter quickly used his sword,
And the wolf landed on a board.
Then Susan came down to see the sea,
And after that we were all happy.


I'm in the fifth grade and some of my poems are my school assignments.  I hope you like them.

© Copyright 2005 Jake - All Rights Reserved
DavePage
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1 posted 2005-01-30 06:11 PM


Very nice touch there Peter.

Dave

Justine Uff
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2 posted 2005-01-31 10:34 PM


I think I read this book once.  You've done a good job with this.

Martie
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3 posted 2005-01-31 10:45 PM


Wonderful!!
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4 posted 2005-01-31 11:45 PM


Well I just bet you get an A+ on that assignment.  Nicely done, graphic and your poem.
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5 posted 2005-02-01 12:12 PM


LOL, loved this take on that old story.
I'm giving you an A+

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