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Paper Boy New Member
since 2005-01-28
Posts 2MA-USA |
 A crazy swishing in the air Disturbed everyone at the pavilion fair When a million vermin came to rest Which put the queen's gluttony to the test Would she eat her currant plate She will have everlasting fat at this rate  I'm in the fifth grade and some of my poems are school assignments. I hope you like them |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
paperboy I like the way you rhymed this and the graphics...also the humor...you did good! Welcome to Passions...I hope you will post more!  |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
The fifth grade? WOW...welcome to Passions! |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
Fun - welcome to Passions-  SusanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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GG Member Elite
since 2002-12-03
Posts 3532Lost in thought |
Haha! This is cool... Well done with the rhyme, too. Welcome to the Blue Pages Keep writin'! Always, Alyssa He was a man of sorrows |
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Sadelite Member Elite
since 2003-10-11
Posts 2519 |
Definitely cute and well illustrated! Gee, I wish I wrote like that in the fifth grade! Keep up the writing, Paper Boy. Seems you've got somethin' there and no bugz about it!) Welcome to Passions! |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
I think it's great that you are only in 5th grade and writing such great poetry! Keep Sharing and welcome to Pip!   ~Alli~ |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Very well done!! Good to meet you!  |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Well now that Queen is sure braver than me, I could not eat any of those bugs you see!  Welcome to the world of poetry, and can't wait to read more of your work. |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
 welcome |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
Welcome to Passions and I hope you enjoy your time here. |
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VAS Member Rara Avis
since 2000-11-16
Posts 7450Oregon |
funny bugz Whether on the shoal or on the shore, |
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Nan
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-20
Posts 21191Cape Cod Massachusetts USA |
You're going to be a great poet, Jake - Of course you already are. This is a really good poem that tells a great story... |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
Jake, I really enjoyed this, even the bugs LOL I used to sell bugs...'good bugs' that eat 'bad bugs' and my nickname at my daughter's school was...you guessed it! the bug lady.  WELCOME! |
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