Open Poetry #34 |
With A Smile Like The Moon |
James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
With A Smile Like The Moon Oh he could smile like the moon and send them there; knew it, and went there too, seeking, seeking, always seeking. Somewhere on the way he tore his soul against a cloud and let the light out, doomed himself to seeking, always seeking. Still he smiled and sent the ladies even followed on occasion, tried to fill his vacuum from their light and failed each time, still seeking. Waxing now in his own reflection trying to shine, cursing as he fails, he does what he knows, fail, pretend, and seek with a smile like the moon. |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
James? This likes me. |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
It's ok if he likes you, but I wouldn't let him get too close..... |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
tried to fill his vacuum from their light I think I'll try to avoid one such as this... I'm dim enough already. *G* Seriously... this has an eerie feel I wasn't expecting from the title... left me shivering. *S* Fantastic write! |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
It can be a Cheshire Cat, or a Jack-O-Lantern....and you don't know until it's too late.... |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Jamies An interesting character study...I liked it lots! |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
very much enjoyed this, love the line smile like the moon. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
Somewhere on the way he tore his soul against a cloud and let the light out, doomed himself to seeking, always seeking. awesome, restlessness well described I loved this |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
this made me think... |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Library for this one, James. Sounds like a man that knows his error ... which I would say is the path back to finding his light. I really liked the depth of this and am going back up to read it again. .....jo |
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James_A_Fraser Senior Member
since 2003-09-03
Posts 972Out Making Anticlines |
I hope he figures it out, but I'm pretty sure he won't. Some men never qualify as anything but large boys, I'm afraid..... |
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