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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I responded to a lady - erica on Wednesday, September 09, 1998, 14:10:00. On the Scroll and wrote an answer to some words. Her words have given me so much inspiration that I still remember them and write as if I hear them. as the sun sets in the west my heart sets with it. for with the day ending so does your love for me. if this love were ment to be then why are you leaving? is it something i did or failed to do? My words in reply The sun rises in the east I rise with it I see the dawn begin I stride with it I chase the running day I leave your love behind I dont think about it It's all gone But that's my kind And I then wrote a poem called "sometime" which doesn't fit in but still seems to, in my mind Sometime In a smile Desire twitches feeds Of sufficiency On Images Masked with sounds In a light Darkened with illuminated scenes Of captured ideas Within your thoughts Within your mask Within your room Sometime |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
Both poems are excellent writes. The connection is visual in words of lighted scenes Captured ideas, a relationship of two on the opposite ends of a situation: “East is east and West is west, and never the twain shall meet.” One with the idea to abandon, or shy away, the other to admire from a distance wanting to be involved. Just a thought… Enjoyed the read. Thanks DavePage. JL  |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
excellent and well done |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
I'll take this Critques words out as well. JL Both poems are excellent writes. The connection is visual in words of lighted scenes Captured ideas, a relationship of two on the opposite ends of a situation: “East is east and West is west, and never the twain shall meet.” One with the idea to abandon, or shy away, the other to admire from a distance wanting to be involved. Just a thought… Enjoyed the read. Thanks DavePage. JL I never even thought about the connection. You hit it on the head. She wrote and I responded but with only words not thought. Thanks Dave LeeJ -------------------------------------------------------------------------------- excellent and well done Thanks Lee Dave |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Two words.......Love It. :-) Within this heart you'll find love |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
east is east and west is west and never the two shall meet this is somthing that hits home right now, sorry nice words though, thanks |
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