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Greeneyes

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-09-09

Posts 9903
In Your Poetic Mind

0 posted 2005-01-26 10:30 PM

~For Gentle Spirit~

Loving Men

~~
the way it was
perhaps use to be

the beginning

taking the rib into
my own body
the root for life

like planting seeds
one then another
watching each drink from the
vibrant wells
in calmer waters

indeed you learn the depth
and how each moment will transform life
and grow as certain as the blossom
only to die under the sands of time

the sea is heavy and telling
yet just before the storm
the hues gold and lavender,
rubbed against skin;

paint the beaches slowly
where traces of life connect

the breeze will caress
the side of gentle
and sing
of promised rain

~~*~~
My Shadow is the only one
that walks beside me
~~**~~

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2005-01-26 10:33 PM

"the sea is heavy and telling
yet just before the storm
the hues gold and lavender,
rubbed against skin;

paint the beaches slowly
where traces of life connect

the breeze will caress
the side of gentle
and sing
of promised rain"

You know I'm keeping this one

ThisDiamond
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-02-22

Posts 9353
Michigan, USA

2 posted 2005-01-26 10:36 PM

This is very lovely Lauren.
You have a melodic style that is quite unique, and very beautiful.
TD

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

3 posted 2005-01-27 08:21 AM

oh ....God L~

I will be back, when I can get the tears to stop...

you make me smile my friend...
and you have touched this tired,
worn soul and heart....

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

4 posted 2005-01-27 08:30 AM

oh boy, I was so happy to see you and clicked on you with great anticipation, and I'm never disappointed...

the Adam and Eve part....thought about that many times to...makes ya wonder doesn't it?

Hugs to ya lady, good to see you

Janet Marie
Member Laureate

since 2000-01-22

Posts 18554

5 posted 2005-01-27 08:32 AM

the sea is heavy and telling
yet just before the storm
the hues gold and lavender,
rubbed against skin;

paint the beaches slowly
where traces of life connect

the breeze will caress
the side of gentle
and sing
of promised rain

=========================

and promised poetry....
and yours is some of the loveliest.
Beautiful offering of verse poetess L.

Among the kingdom of the winds ...
perhaps there is one of elegant mind,
who has no need to intrude on the solitude of single things.

CB

Seymour Tabin
Member Empyrean

since 1999-07-07

Posts 31720
Tamarac Fla

6 posted 2005-01-27 08:33 AM

Greeneyes
Your green eyes have seen the green sea.
Beautiful write.

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

7 posted 2005-01-27 08:42 AM

I think at times
when we write for others
the best comes streaming
from our pens...

You did well, little girl...

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-12-27

Posts 8348
Florida

8 posted 2005-01-27 08:50 AM

yes, very beautiful.

Glad you are back.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

9 posted 2005-01-27 08:55 AM

what a beautiful write for our Donna

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

10 posted 2005-01-27 11:41 AM

All morning I have been reading and re-reading this Lauren and I am still so moved that I find it hard to reply in any way that will make sense...

----------------------------

Loving Men

~~
the way it was
perhaps use to be

the beginning
--------------------------
You summed this up perfectly

--------------------------
taking the rib into
my own body
the root for life

like planting seeds
one then another
watching each drink from the
vibrant wells
in calmer waters

indeed you learn the depth
and how each moment will transform life
and grow as certain as the blossom
only to die under the sands of time
-------------------------------

In these words I can see
just how much you have come
to know me~
not just on the surface...
for this L~ I am truly grateful.....

-------------------------------
the sea is heavy and telling
yet just before the storm
the hues gold and lavender,
rubbed against skin;

paint the beaches slowly
where traces of life connect
----------------------------------

Yes, the sea is/can be heavy and
the hues do lighten the weight
my friend, and they do paint
the beaches and as for the traces
of life...
well, you already know.

-------------------------------
the breeze will caress
the side of gentle
and sing
of promised rain

------------------------------

and this? I still don't have
the words for the beauty in this
or what it means to me.
Yes, the caress, the song of
promised rain......

This makes me smile, makes me cry
and makes me thank God that
you HEAR me my friend...

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

11 posted 2005-01-27 01:27 PM

simply beautiful -

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

JL
Member Ascendant

since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

12 posted 2005-01-27 03:21 PM

This is very, very nice.
Enjoyed the read.

JL

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

13 posted 2005-01-27 03:59 PM

Wow, could I ever see these lines as part of a song Lauren, they are spectacular!

the sea is heavy and telling
yet just before the storm
the hues gold and lavender,
rubbed against skin;

paint the beaches slowly
where traces of life connect

the breeze will caress
the side of gentle
and sing
of promised rain

The most beautiful thing we can experience is the mysterious.
It is the source of all art and science.
Albert Einstein

~ Carpe' Diem ~

D.Lester Young
Senior Member

since 2001-12-08

Posts 1219
Austin, Tx

14 posted 2005-01-27 04:04 PM

This ia a exquisite poem with so many stanzas coming to light to enter you in delight.

littlewing
Member Rara Avis

since 2003-03-02

Posts 9655
New York

15 posted 2005-01-28 08:25 AM

kind of like Waiting for the Sun, Lauren . . .

beautiful ans sad, I have missed you.

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

16 posted 2005-01-28 10:42 AM

Lovely, Lauren

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