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In A Space Between Clouds
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In A Space Between Clouds |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass 
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In A Space Between Clouds Too dark for sky below these clouds; a week of rain comes down to this: the breakup time, sky already fallen, leftover clouds starting to slink away like the chastened crowd after a riot. They chose night to do it. A small break over there, darkness spreading into black, maybe sky and stars now if I watch and wait. Stars. Suddenly I need one -- need it – and one is coming now, tiny, blue, struggling into view. One star, and another there? No. No stars, and sudden perspective: there is no break in the clouds. They went thicker, darker there. No star stood a chance against them, though hope tried to bring one through. Hope nearly succeeded. There was that moment, a magic pause in all the rain, when the wet dark turned at last and yielded up a star. One star. Pure. Clear. Imaginary. [This message has been edited by Ratleader (01-22-2005 09:42 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Suddenly I need one -- need it – and one is coming now, tiny, blue, struggling into view I know that need, Ed...constantly looking out and up wanting a clear night and a star sighting~~ *s M |
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Beki Senior Member
since 1999-09-15
Posts 1569Newport Beach, CA, USA |
I remember this night..we do share the same few miles of sky after all...you described it very well. I liek the tone of this one respectful yet knowing what is needed and finding it even if you had to imagine it....very nice Ed |
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Snow
since 2000-10-16
Posts 1170desert flower looking for rain |
maybe it's me, maybe it's van morrison cd i have playing .... but reading this, gave me such a pang ... takes good writing to get me to react with emotions. "so I wait for you like a lonely house |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
This speaks to me - of hope - of belief in the perseverence of man's soul - wonderful  SusanIf I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Stars. Suddenly I need one -- need it – and one is coming now, tiny, blue, struggling into view. One star, and another there? No. No stars, and sudden perspective: there is no break in the clouds. They went thicker, darker there. No star stood a chance against them, though hope tried to bring one through. Hope nearly succeeded. There was that moment, a magic pause The star may have been imaginary... the magic you write is not... and it lifts a spirit... just as that twinkle of light (seen or unseen) parts the clouds. Fantastic work, my friend... you just keep getting better and better!!! |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Yes... better and better all the time... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Ed Sometimes what you search for is right there in your own eyes. I loved the feeling of hope in this!  |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
just what I needed this morning |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
Even an imaginary star can fulfill a wish... for... this beauty came back up again for further enjoyment. *S* |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
A small break over there, darkness spreading into black, maybe sky and stars now if I watch and wait. Stars. Suddenly I need one -- need it – and one is coming now, tiny, blue, struggling into view. I have known this need also Ed and God you write it so well... and suddenly am reminded of the old saying to be star you must shine your own light, and don't worry about the darkness, for that is when stars shine their brightest.... thank you for this sir. |
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wranx Member Elite
since 2002-06-07
Posts 3689Moved from a shack to a barn |
Very nicely done, Ed |
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