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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2005-01-24 10:10 AM


just this:

I wish you didn't know

I pray I could return the tithe
and roll the salt back to the sea
and take back all the breath of me
that blew your hair just so - like that...

if I could, I would you know
for heaven it is just like this -
cymbals crashing crescendo

leaving trumpets perfectly
curled within the crystals

it's

another morning tide
as I

dot the shore with green.

© Copyright 2005 serenity blaze - All Rights Reserved
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2 posted 2005-01-24 10:32 AM


a very pretty write
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3 posted 2005-01-24 10:36 AM


Well, ya both paint the shores golden, if you ask your readers. (But je comprends, so hugs to both)
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4 posted 2005-01-24 10:50 AM


The green adds color, every time without fail.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

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5 posted 2005-01-24 02:00 PM


bittersweet
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6 posted 2005-01-24 02:46 PM



hugging you both...

beautiful, Karen...

"When the power of love overcomes the love
of power the world will know peace."
--Jimi Hendrix

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7 posted 2005-01-25 06:19 AM




M

and i knew in the crystalline knowledge of you
~Buckingham/Nicks

LeeJ
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8 posted 2005-01-25 08:48 AM


had to come back for another read...your writing is absolute and makes for an interesting value to all those who read...


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9 posted 2005-01-25 09:06 AM


serenity,
I always say gather honey while you may
Who knows what of another day.

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10 posted 2005-01-25 07:13 PM


amazing.

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

serenity blaze
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11 posted 2005-01-25 07:40 PM


Thank you all very kindly for reading.

And?

Well, some things ya'll don't get to know!



(Now who's mysterious?)



*special hugs for sweet maree*


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12 posted 2005-01-25 10:39 PM


...

wow

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13 posted 2005-01-25 10:45 PM


hugging you both!  
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14 posted 2005-01-26 01:32 AM


I wished neither of you knew.

The most beautiful thing we can experience is the mysterious. It is the source of all art and science.
Albert Einstein

~ Carpe' Diem ~

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15 posted 2005-01-26 12:31 PM


There's e'er a bit of mystery
within in the voice serenity...

beautiful writing!

~tier

serenity blaze
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16 posted 2005-01-26 05:42 PM


Thanks tiers...and I'm shaking my head.

I hope my comment about "mysterious" wasn't misunderstood. It was just a joke regarding how vague I am in my writings at times, and not intended as a tease to our Mysterian Sharon. (k, Shar? okay.)



I've been working on being a little more accessible in my writing, and I fear I failed in that regard, and maree certainly deserves better than my meager offering here.

I'm a mess. sigh


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17 posted 2005-01-26 11:05 PM


its lovely Karen....and very soft spoken...

~~*~~
My Shadow is the only one
that walks beside me
~~**~~

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18 posted 2005-01-27 12:17 PM


Karen,

you know she knows you know that you both know and THAT is what this is all about, so plbbt!

As soon as I read this, I saw you both, on her shores, her lighthouse writings, alive, waves crashing and the both of you running along the shore, smiling and laughing.  Relieved . . .

It is most beautiful.

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19 posted 2005-01-27 12:21 PM


this is sooo very beautiful K and I believe you got your message to Maree across just perfectly and that is what counts m'dear.
you both.

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