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Huan Yi
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0 posted 2005-01-23 08:41 AM



Worn by currents,
the dumbness of things,
this ship may fail.

Many
have tried against the tide
to sail and lost their way before,
and nothing assures our efforts true
will not in darkness sink as well.

And yet
I have seen upon the land,
in their harbors safe and warm,
the sadness
of those
who out to sea again...
are simply too afraid.

So let us then,
despite our histories,
go together aboard.

Arm
in arm,
to follow the sun.

Perhaps
it is we
who will find Cathay.


© Copyright 2005 John Pawlik - All Rights Reserved
Denise
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1 posted 2005-01-23 08:50 AM


Possible success can only come by not giving up. Giving up is sure failure. So we really have not choice but to keep trying for the prize.

Well done, John!

Susan Caldwell
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2 posted 2005-01-23 09:08 AM


John,

This made me think of the ship I was on in the Navy (USS Canopus AS-34 www.usscanopus.homestead.com) and how much I miss it.  I loved being out to sea...

Now I know that isn't what your words were about but that is what thoughts they inspired from me.

Thank you.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

Huan Yi
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3 posted 2005-01-23 09:24 AM


Susan,

You are welcome.

Whatever is good for you is fine with me.
A poem should be a being apart from whoever
had the good fortune to be its scribe.
I am glad Christopher made you think of
your good times on the USS Canopus,
(though I don’t think that’s how you spell it).
I myself have fond memories of my time
at Camp Tequila.

John


Margherita
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4 posted 2005-01-23 10:07 AM


So let us then,
despite our histories,
go together aboard.

Arm
in arm,
to follow the sun.


You are a leading soul.

this is beautiful.

Love, Margherita

Susan Caldwell
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5 posted 2005-01-23 10:26 PM


What isn't spelled right John?  Canopus?  Nope you got it right. Promise.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

suthern
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6 posted 2005-01-24 03:25 PM


And whereever the perhaps leads... the promise is in the together. *S* Beautiful!!
Drauntz
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7 posted 2007-04-28 02:10 AM


"Arm
in arm,
to follow the sun."

how manly and strong and great!! it is great poem too.

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