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RobertB
Senior Member

since 1999-09-26

Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

0 posted 2005-01-20 08:45 PM

Passing Through

To the scab-eyed, passing through
street sweepings of dog dreams
whimpering after porch rabbits
stumbling over a crow’s penknife call,
blind-tooth reality bites
hard on breastbone wishing with
cabled thoughts colandered
into a mind alley trash bin of
recycled gray matters not
when tear scarred poems recite
taunts of marrow left behind
in death colored Autumn.

Robert

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

1 posted 2005-01-20 09:21 PM

when tear scarred poems recite
taunts of marrow left behind
in death colored Autumn.

this is a very powerful poem - this ending really reached inside of me - grabbed me -

Excellent -

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

RSWells
Member Elite

since 2001-06-17

Posts 2533

2 posted 2005-01-20 09:21 PM

Tres edgy. A ranty quality that smacks of impatience. I kinda like the breathless wandering.

Poets against the war is redundant

Snow

Senior Member

since 2000-10-16

Posts 1170
desert flower looking for rain

3 posted 2005-01-21 12:59 PM

this..... i feel.

"so I wait for you like a lonely house
till you will see me again and live in me.
Till then my windows ache"
p.neruda

RobertB
Senior Member

since 1999-09-26

Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

4 posted 2005-01-21 07:31 AM

Thank you snow, susan and RS for reading.

I had second thoughts on posting this one. I wanted to sit on it for a week or so...but as RS said...."impatience" got the better of me.

Robert

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

5 posted 2005-01-21 07:57 AM

cabled thoughts colandered
into a mind alley trash bin of
recycled gray matters not

so often..I feel this way

Maybe the Winter will freeze the past until the Spring can cleanse it..at least for me, I hope that is the case~~

M

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

6 posted 2005-01-21 08:23 AM

I'm with M here

excellent write Robert

RobertB
Senior Member

since 1999-09-26

Posts 1104
Champaign, IL

7 posted 2005-01-21 05:46 PM

why does Autumn ever have to end...to me there is a pall that hangs over that season, because I know that death is so close behind.

Yes, Maureen, spring is coming.....it always does.

Robert

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