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RSWells
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0 posted 2005-01-19 05:10 PM



This is where I would have written of love
or rather its profound disappointments,
how in its luscious choir no member
ever sang with me beyond the moans,
wails and groans that passed for its music

This is not the place to tell of Molson sot
goons from Lethbridge and the heroics
of using an ATV and pick-up to exhaust
a nearly calving moose to its death alone
in a farmer’s field that late May evening

No, this need be a poem about love
or lacking its song a reason put forth
on how so many bodies were opened
while offered hearts weren’t captured,
why no lasting duet echoes a single note

No, this is neither the place for attempting
to peer beneath the ball cap, sunglasses,
false beard that uniform the bank robber
nor explain that for every inch of barrel
witnesses add two describing his height

This should have been a written exploration
on why no violin ever leaned on my bed,
no hand moved from piano key to me,
no purposeful acoustics in devoted hum
harmonized with eyes soft and willing

These note-less words are instead a sentence,
to bear a heart that beats iambic rhythm,
a voice whose scope should have encompassed
the range of nearly every able songbird
yet went unheard and worse goes unrecorded

Oh soul! oh me! oh!
Oh sole ‘ol me! oh!
O solo mio

Poets against the war is redundant

© Copyright 2005 Richard S. Wells jr. - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2005-01-19 05:24 PM


and a haunting melody it is...

Bravo sir.

I think this is my new favorite of yours.

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
2 posted 2005-01-19 06:00 PM


RSWells
You sing very well, enjoyed.

Gentle Spirit
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3 posted 2005-01-19 06:06 PM


There were a few stanzas I was going to highlight but then I realized that to highlight any would be unnecessary as the entire poem sings in many different melodies and to chose just one would be impossible.  Lovely tunes Richard.

The greatest beauty on earth, is
found in the hearts of those
who love....

Aenimal
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4 posted 2005-01-20 12:10 PM


those last lines.. heartbreaking. incredible writing
Ratleader
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5 posted 2005-01-20 12:28 PM


Sadness and wit....a hard couple to marry, but you have done it here...and the ending, so poignant....this one's gonna stay with me a while.

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LeeJ
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6 posted 2005-01-20 08:30 AM


your brilliant and amazing....
Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
7 posted 2005-01-20 08:54 AM


This should have been a written exploration
on why no violin ever leaned on my bed,
no hand moved from piano key to me,
no purposeful acoustics in devoted hum
harmonized with eyes soft and willing

~*~

The exercise in realism and desire
is well wrought within this...

For nothing is as it ever seems.

Excellent, and I agree...one of the "new best" favorites...

so libraried, it is...

Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen?  Keeping in mind, I must stand close...and keep my promises...

inkedgoddess
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8 posted 2005-01-20 09:36 PM


song or songless, sometimes you just have to work with the magic you were given

very nice
what's the crime tho?

Susan
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9 posted 2005-01-20 09:42 PM


I so agree with Ratleader -

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Robert Frazier
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10 posted 2005-01-21 09:25 AM


. . .couldn't say it better than ratleader, except to add that i'll be looking for more or yours.

Rf

RSWells
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11 posted 2005-01-21 12:19 PM


Thank you all for such gracious comments on a write I wasn't sure would fly far. The last two I posted, both free verse, were written so fast I couldn't allow myself to attach much value to them. But the subconscious probably carries things around and if I get out of the way and let it flow, well who knows? In studying this craft I read again and again published, honored poets share that they hang onto their better poems for years and rewrite them sometimes hudreds of times.

Time and patience, is there ever enough of either?

To answer your question Michelle, the title came from where I stumbled on the sad and infuriating story of the moose, in a Canadian crime stoppers story.

Poets against the war is redundant

RobertB
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12 posted 2005-01-21 05:49 PM


I enjoyed this very much.

Good

Robert

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