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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533
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This is where I would have written of love or rather its profound disappointments, how in its luscious choir no member ever sang with me beyond the moans, wails and groans that passed for its music This is not the place to tell of Molson sot goons from Lethbridge and the heroics of using an ATV and pick-up to exhaust a nearly calving moose to its death alone in a farmer’s field that late May evening No, this need be a poem about love or lacking its song a reason put forth on how so many bodies were opened while offered hearts weren’t captured, why no lasting duet echoes a single note No, this is neither the place for attempting to peer beneath the ball cap, sunglasses, false beard that uniform the bank robber nor explain that for every inch of barrel witnesses add two describing his height This should have been a written exploration on why no violin ever leaned on my bed, no hand moved from piano key to me, no purposeful acoustics in devoted hum harmonized with eyes soft and willing These note-less words are instead a sentence, to bear a heart that beats iambic rhythm, a voice whose scope should have encompassed the range of nearly every able songbird yet went unheard and worse goes unrecorded Oh soul! oh me! oh! Oh sole ‘ol me! oh! O solo mio Poets against the war is redundant |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
and a haunting melody it is... Bravo sir. I think this is my new favorite of yours. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
RSWells You sing very well, enjoyed. |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
There were a few stanzas I was going to highlight but then I realized that to highlight any would be unnecessary as the entire poem sings in many different melodies and to chose just one would be impossible. Lovely tunes Richard.  The greatest beauty on earth, is |
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Aenimal Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-18
Posts 7350the ass-end of space |
those last lines.. heartbreaking. incredible writing |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Sadness and wit....a hard couple to marry, but you have done it here...and the ending, so poignant....this one's gonna stay with me a while. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
your brilliant and amazing.... |
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
This should have been a written exploration on why no violin ever leaned on my bed, no hand moved from piano key to me, no purposeful acoustics in devoted hum harmonized with eyes soft and willing ~*~ The exercise in realism and desire is well wrought within this... For nothing is as it ever seems. Excellent, and I agree...one of the "new best" favorites... so libraried, it is... Karilea - if I whisper, will you listen? Keeping in mind, I must stand close...and keep my promises... |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
song or songless, sometimes you just have to work with the magic you were given very nice what's the crime tho? |
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Susan Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104walking the surreal |
I so agree with Ratleader - Susan If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . . |
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Robert Frazier Senior Member
since 2003-02-06
Posts 1014 |
. . .couldn't say it better than ratleader, except to add that i'll be looking for more or yours. Rf |
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RSWells Member Elite
since 2001-06-17
Posts 2533 |
Thank you all for such gracious comments on a write I wasn't sure would fly far. The last two I posted, both free verse, were written so fast I couldn't allow myself to attach much value to them. But the subconscious probably carries things around and if I get out of the way and let it flow, well who knows? In studying this craft I read again and again published, honored poets share that they hang onto their better poems for years and rewrite them sometimes hudreds of times. Time and patience, is there ever enough of either? To answer your question Michelle, the title came from where I stumbled on the sad and infuriating story of the moose, in a Canadian crime stoppers story. Poets against the war is redundant |
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RobertB Senior Member
since 1999-09-26
Posts 1104Champaign, IL |
I enjoyed this very much. Good Robert |
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