First and maybe Last....Triolet....

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Open Poetry #34

First and maybe Last....Triolet....

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

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South Carolina, USA

0 posted 2005-01-19 07:09 PM

The dashing seas await release
in roar and wash of daunting wave.
As tides do fall in draining peace.
The dashing seas await release
until the water’s flow does cease
and morsels find their salty grave
The dashing seas await release
in roar and wash of daunting wave.

again....heh...

Upon the rise of waxing moon
and fall of dipper’s dribbling drop
an owl does hoot the sleeping loon
upon the rise of waxing moon
before the fall of sugar’s spoon
and spillage of the milky slop
upon the rise of waxing moon
and fall of dipper’s dribbling drop

[This message has been edited by Magnus (01-19-2005 08:14 PM).]

Gentle Spirit
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1 posted 2005-01-19 07:11 PM

A beautiful triolet Barry. Very well done.
Have missed your words.

Magnus

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since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

2 posted 2005-01-19 07:43 PM

2nd and 8th must rhyme, repeat.....mumble, mumble,
mumble, grumble...sheesh....

BJ's master toilet....errrr, triolet

Sunshine

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3 posted 2005-01-19 07:55 PM

HEH....

Now do it again!

BluesSerenade
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since 2001-10-23

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By the Seaside

4 posted 2005-01-23 03:20 PM

The dashing seas await release
in roar and wash of daunting wave.
As tides do fall in draining peace.
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
upon the rise of waxing moon
before the fall of sugar’s spoon

Very nice writing, Barry.
It is always such a pleasure to read you.

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla

5 posted 2005-01-23 03:34 PM

Barry,
Well done my friend.

*Alli4000*

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The World of Poetry

6 posted 2005-01-23 03:34 PM

Great write!!!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

Ericc
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since 2003-01-31

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7 posted 2005-01-23 04:00 PM

Wonderful!

Eric

Susan
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walking the surreal

8 posted 2005-01-23 04:06 PM

Wax on dear sir - your words are polished perfection -

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

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