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DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

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0 posted 2005-01-19 05:33 PM

A Women Watches

She stood upon the hill
Her life strode before her
She was pretty as a song
And this is now her bill
She smiled at all she saw
And quietly thought and won
She had no malice in her heart
She loved it all in fun
She saw the hardship, saw the spite
She saw the beauty too
She breathed the air of freedom
But still it felt askew
She saw a man
She saw a love
She saw the pain that came
It wasn't brutal what occurred
Just things were not the same
She went to love another
He loved another too
She wanted him for her own
He wanted her for glue
His family he wanted to keep
A women carefully chosen
Someone to live a family life
Many are called, not frozen
Her mind is wide
Her work is hard
Her heart is wide and deep
She never mind’s the upward climb
Though some feel it too steep
And so a loving women watches
While the world sleeps
Bewitched by her sunset
Dreaming of her dreams
Hoping her life will come
Not tearing at the seams
She want’s her vision
She want’s her world
She want’s her life
And the pleasure’s of being a girl
Just to be the pleasure
Not someone's little pearl

DavePage
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since 2003-12-21

Posts 2917

1 posted 2005-01-19 05:36 PM

I should say that I used plural of woman deliberately on this.

Yes it is wrong but it seemed right when I wrote it.

dave

time prophet
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In New Zealand Amongst the Ancient Trees

2 posted 2005-01-19 05:41 PM

I like it better the way it is Dave. Gives it a nice subtle twist.

MGROVES

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since 2004-02-01

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california

3 posted 2005-01-19 05:45 PM

very nice infact quite good

DavePage
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4 posted 2005-01-19 05:50 PM

Thanks Time and Marsha

I will be taking a break from writing now.

I've written too much and I need to concentrate on other things.

Thanks for your words.

Dave

JL
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since 2004-04-01

Posts 6128
Texas, USA

5 posted 2005-01-20 12:24 PM

DavePage:

You have written a powerful message in this write.
So much enjoyed, as it came to life while reading.

I hope you aren’t gone to long. I enjoy reading your postings.
Be safe.

JL

DavePage
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6 posted 2005-01-20 07:21 PM

I'm not gone JL, I've just stopped writing.

Thanks

Dave

Susan
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walking the surreal

7 posted 2005-01-20 09:46 PM

Enjoyed this a great deal-

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

HopeS
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8 posted 2005-01-21 02:16 AM

Enjoyed !! it was so touching

Hope

LeeJ
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since 2003-06-19

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9 posted 2005-01-21 07:30 AM

very passionate write...took the reader by the hand, as if walking on the shore and sharing a story

enjoyed

DavePage
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10 posted 2005-01-21 01:47 PM

Susan
Enjoyed this a great deal-

Susan
If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Thanks Susan.

Written about 10 years ago I forgot I had written it.

I am as I said now stopping writing.   I have about 530 I have catalogued and about another 2100 files in my "work to be done directory" to be reviewed and catalogued.

Dave

HopeS

Enjoyed !! it was so touching

Hope

Pleased you liked it Hope.   I did specifically have two women in mind when I wrote it.

Thanks

Dave

LeeJ


very passionate write...took the reader by the hand, as if walking on the shore and sharing a story

enjoyed

Thanks Lee - it is one of my novel style poems.

regards to everyone

Dave

A Romantic Heart
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since 1999-09-03

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Forever In Your Heart

11 posted 2005-01-21 10:31 PM

I Like the way your poetry is going lately...very ..very passionate..and don't stop writing..not now when it is getting as good as this!

I enjoy reading you..but maybe i am partial to Birtish men...LOL..I have a thing for them...I wonder why?

~Keep writing..and I'll keep reading!

~Love and Hugs ARH

DavePage
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12 posted 2005-01-22 03:55 PM

Romantic

Thanks for the compliment but I am stopping.

I need to. I'm not even looking at all the stuff I've written and I will work through that over years.

A part of my life was writing poetry.

Over a period of 15 years I managed to spend 5 actually at home.

I worked for 8 years virtually non-stop. 3 bouts of food poisoning and I hit 50 in IT when people try to pretend you dont exist and I enjoyed the pleasure of just standing leaning against a wall while the winds of Cirencester gave me decent air.

I've hit a point now I've written probably non-stop for over 6 years.

What was fluid and flowed by itself now has to be wrenched.

A Woman Watches was written about a specific woman but when AOL has a coffee poetry section and the Scroll and Passions were virtually ideas.

I need to get back to a life and that does require in IT that I commit completely especially at 56.

Thanks

Dave

MGROVES

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california

13 posted 2006-08-21 03:17 AM

revisiting a smile

My spirit will rise
above the sea~
There will be no drowning
of my soul or me~

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