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RedStoneEB Senior Member
since 2003-06-08
Posts 772uk 
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Skies of bloody crimson death circle above Crows pecking at the sins escaping higher than they should Upon the shores of my mind souls find a home Haunting my waking till my sleepless nights are none. The rain cries my tears for I am a man without pain Emotionless the machine created on its own What is love to me but a ridding of desires? Greater things await me than the family of long life. My name shall be written in the sands unwashed away every step I take is walked again by no other I am their hopes and desires the hero saving cowards Leading men towards their ends without been named the leader. I choose a life within short span to live forever unlike man And upon my deathbed all my sins shall leave Forgiveness granted to a warrior without dreams and there I take my place in hell smiling as I do. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
"My name shall be written in the sands unwashed away every step I take is walked again by no other I am their hopes and desires the hero saving cowards Leading men towards their ends without been named the leader" Chilling but interesting thoughts here. I could imagine a terrorist leader saying this. "Forgiveness granted to a warrior without dreams and there I take my place in hell smiling as I do." Since Dave didn't understand why that thought came to mind, thought I'd clarify which lines made me feel this was an anti-hero, or one who glorified himself at the expense of others. If I misread, I am sorry, but that;s how it hit me in the initial reading. [This message has been edited by Midnitesun (10-27-2004 09:27 AM).] |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Good honest write and I dont imagine Terror Leaders in your words and I am appalled that someone should suggest it. Dave |
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Earth Angel Member Empyrean
since 2002-08-27
Posts 40215Realms of Light |
I was pleased when I saw that there was a new post by you! Even though I find the content rather chilling to my sensibilities, I certainly can appreciate your writing ability! Love, Peace & Harmony, EA |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
this gave me chills, great ones and good ones...smiles and hugs...it's nice to feel the old man there with you...He is you know....tremendous work well done, God's got a tear of joy in his eyes I bet. |
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