Sundays singe like hell (lighthouse series, scene 14)

How to Join	Member's Area	Private Library	Search	Sanctuary		Login
Main Forums	Discussion	Tech Talk	Mature Content	Archives	A home without a wall, Our haven without ends, A circle we all call Our Family of Friends!

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

0 posted 2005-01-17 05:28 AM

dawn rises from the blue
thick as a golden fleece

to kiss
the heavy-eyed and
stockingless

this is her blood-tinged awakening

they scramble in the moisture
of her birth
poor little sea-goers
they vomit
the wickedness of fish

and
tremble the slow rhythm of flesh
green-faced and delirious

i sigh a downward glance
tired of my shadow, tired of my stance

Sundays singe like hell

it reeks of sweat
of cheap perfumes
the stale stench of sea-men
that swim

naked
along the shore

beneath
the wink of harboured lights

all I can taste is this moment, all I can breathe is your life, cause sooner or later it's over, I just don't want to miss you tonight.~GooGooDolls~

passing shadows
Member Empyrean

since 1999-08-26

Posts 45577
displaced

1 posted 2005-01-17 05:31 AM

love this series!

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

2 posted 2005-01-17 09:43 AM

you paint the picture so vividly and my eyes soak it in...

Magnus

Member Laureate

since 2001-10-10

Posts 14135
South Carolina, USA

3 posted 2005-01-17 10:24 AM

These are worth the price of admission. Such
a mood...wow.

Robert Frazier
Senior Member

since 2003-02-06

Posts 1014

4 posted 2005-01-17 10:43 AM

i admire that you wear it totally out on your sleeve . . . and with powerful style!

Rf

wranx
Member Elite

since 2002-06-07

Posts 3689
Moved from a shack to a barn

5 posted 2005-01-17 11:15 AM

Still, you write dark beauty, Darksis

Love these!

Gentle Spirit
Member Patricius

since 2000-10-09

Posts 13989

6 posted 2005-01-17 11:18 AM

Ed is correct, this is on your sleeve poetry,
to the bone deep. Well done Maree.

~D~

Martie

Moderator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-09-21

Posts 28049
California

7 posted 2005-01-17 12:25 PM

Maree

It is the stark and original imagery and the truth of thought that make this series so good. Loved this one!

*Alli4000*

Member Elite

since 2004-03-21

Posts 3188
The World of Poetry

8 posted 2005-01-17 07:36 PM

Enjoyed this!

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

Lighthousebob
Member Elite

since 2000-06-14

Posts 4725
California

9 posted 2005-01-17 08:35 PM

Enjoyed reading and I know that the unique images and the stirred senses found from reading your poem are going to stay with me settling here for awhile because they certainly have made quite an impact on my brain. Very Good Descriptive writing. -Bob

Aenimal
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-18

Posts 7350
the ass-end of space

10 posted 2005-01-17 08:38 PM

how i l#ve this series

Midnitesun

Member Empyrean

since 2001-05-18

Posts 28647
Gaia

11 posted 2005-01-17 08:51 PM

so vivid I could smell some of the imagery
LOL

Susan
Member Ascendant

since 2004-03-27

Posts 5104
walking the surreal

12 posted 2005-01-17 09:16 PM

Bravo!

You draw a vivid picture with your pen

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Dark Angel
Member Patricius

since 1999-08-04

Posts 10095

13 posted 2005-01-18 04:43 AM

Sheeesh, you guys... you're all wonderful with your replies, and for taking the time to read me, I thank you so very much and am happy that you enjoy this series. Ya sure know how to make a girl smile

hugs to all

Mxx

all I can taste is this moment, all I can breathe is your life, cause sooner or later it's over, I just don't want to miss you tonight.~GooGooDolls~

coyote
Senior Member

since 2001-03-17

Posts 1077

14 posted 2005-01-19 08:52 AM

I love this series as well, Maree.
You've really made it though with this one.

hugs,
Billy 8)

"If at first an idea is not absurd, there is no hope for it."
Albert Einstein

Sunshine

Administrator

Member Empyrean

since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

15 posted 2005-01-19 08:56 AM

I've read this several times...
and just remain amazed...

LeeJ
Member Patricius

since 2003-06-19

Posts 13296

16 posted 2005-01-19 09:23 AM

an edge of your seat read...tremendously written

Sudhir Iyer
Member Ascendant

since 2000-04-26

Posts 6943
Mumbai, India : now in Belgium

17 posted 2005-01-19 06:31 PM

Maree, you have always managed to expres yourself so well...

Admiring this muchly...

Regards
Sudhir

Nicole
Senior Member

since 1999-06-23

Posts 1835
Florida

18 posted 2005-01-19 09:46 PM

Girl, yer awesome (so's this poem, btw).

You have always been one of my favorites!

inkedgoddess
Member Rara Avis

since 2002-11-19

Posts 7392
Ohio

19 posted 2005-01-19 10:02 PM

the sea lives in you

Ratleader

Member Rara Avis

since 2003-01-23

Posts 7026
Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass

20 posted 2005-01-20 12:33 PM

You are the master of split meaning....hands-down-don't-even-look-at-the-cards-master.

~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº>
______________Ratleader______________

vandana

Member Patricius

since 1999-10-22

Posts 10463
USA

21 posted 2005-01-20 07:52 PM

one of your best writes

BluesSerenade
Member Patricius

since 2001-10-23

Posts 10549
By the Seaside

22 posted 2005-01-21 01:58 AM

i sigh a downward glance
tired of my shadow, tired of my stance

Sundays singe like hell

Oh goodness, talk about a slow burn!

Jamie
Member Elite

since 2000-06-26

Posts 3168
Blue Heaven

23 posted 2005-01-22 05:35 PM

quote:
this is her blood-tinged awakening

great line Mee
and

hugs

J

There is society where none intrudes, by the deep sea, and music in its roar.
byron

	⇧ top of page ⇧
All times are ET (US). All dates are in Year-Month-Day format.