Open Poetry #34 |
I kept what he lost |
Suede Junior Member
since 2003-08-25
Posts 38Drifting on the soul |
Yellow bird which flew with the sunlight From the nest at dawn to my heart at dusk I heard her stories beneath the leaves Uttered the thoughts of a lonely soul Misplaced smiles and unlived memories Holding a tear dearly, close in the palm Abandoned seeds and unwatered dreams A story lies in the tone of her pain My journey begins in the beat of her breast With a yellow bird in my hand at sunset I flew high to kiss the clouds And I kept what he lost |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
Wonderful write, touched my heart deeply! Love, Margherita |
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Suede Junior Member
since 2003-08-25
Posts 38Drifting on the soul |
Thank you, Margherita. Appreciate your thoughts |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Suede Good write, enjoyed the read. |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
A story lies in the tone of her pain ~*~ You've been gone too long. Welcome home! |
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Suede Junior Member
since 2003-08-25
Posts 38Drifting on the soul |
Thanks Seymour and Sunshine...I feel at home with the fellow poets and amazing souls at Piptalk. Thanks - Suede |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
Wonderful lines here...each precise and uplifting. TD |
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Ratleader
since 2003-01-23
Posts 7026Visiting Earth on a Guest Pass |
Every feather has a tiny story to tell....every bird is a trove of stories. ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸¸¸ºº> ~~(¸¸ ¸¸ºº> ~~~(¸¸ER¸¸ºº> ______________Ratleader______________ |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
Great write! ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
This is one of the best I have read in a good while. Keep writing. Dave |
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EagleScorpion Senior Member
since 2000-03-08
Posts 1644Here, Now, Forever |
wow. some of the best poems are none more than a few powerful sentences.. and you've proven this to be so |
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marcel Senior Member
since 2003-03-02
Posts 660az, usa |
very powerful write! I have found one of those yellow birds myself............. |
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