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Juju
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since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams

0 posted 2005-01-14 08:43 PM


This is A SONG i made up and STUCK IN MY head. so I decided to share

"Hurt me enough and I will go"

Hurt me so sweat
Hurt me oh so
hurt me enough
and I will go

Please give me any one name
So I'll never be the same
Kiss my hand and grant me fame
I will play blind in this game

Hurt me so sweat
Hurt me oh so
hurt me enough
and I will go

Sing a song for this weak heart
Then watch me fall all a part
know me not and call me art
Then we will end as we start

Hurt me so sweat
Hurt me oh so
hurt me enough
and I will go

When I say I'll leave, I'll stay
Even if I go away
and I am left in dismay
I will love you everyday

-Juju

© Copyright 2005 Juju - All Rights Reserved
Susan
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since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
1 posted 2005-01-14 08:56 PM


I really like the last stanza -

did you mean hurt me so sweet? curious-

It has a good rhythm to it too -

Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Juju
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since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams
2 posted 2005-01-14 09:13 PM


Yes actually I did meen tha thank you for catching that. I am glad I kept in meter
Thank you,

Juju

Margherita
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since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236
Eternity
3 posted 2005-01-14 09:14 PM


Juju, this is lovely.

... and yes the rhythm is there!

Love, Margherita

Juju
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since 2003-12-29
Posts 3429
In your dreams
4 posted 2005-01-17 02:32 PM


Thank you!

JUju

Juju - 1.) a magic charm or fetish 2.)Magic 3.)A taboo connected woth the use of magic

The dictionary never lies.... I am magical (;

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