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Swirling is a part of Lightly - Red or Storm is as well
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Swirling is a part of Lightly - Red or Storm is as well |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Swirling You danced around a darkness Value dripped as a jewel Lighting a bauble Kicked into a fire Sparkling blazing Into a darkening night Small words muttered hasty retreats yet you sat there as if the world could end and you dance on the ethos for no-one could hold you yet you dance holding blackness, wearing it as a tribute to dance Your words to me Find me on the ethos |
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JL Member Ascendant
since 2004-04-01
Posts 6128Texas, USA |
And your creditability precedes you, and all who read your fine works are given an opportunity to see open-mindedly a wonderful perspective on life. Enjoyed thie very much DavePage JL |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
yet you sat there as if the world could end and you dance on the ethos for no-one could hold you yet you dance holding blackness, wearing it as a tribute to dance ~*~ Ok, so I enjoyed all of it, but these lines, especially... Dave... oh fudge, my tongue is tied...I am in awe... just...thank you! |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Sunshine and JL Thanks for your very kind words. Lightly has been an under-current for years and is now at sixteen poems with two poems to find the originals of. The only problem is that they are ideas and most are in need of work, but thanks, once again. Dave |
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MGROVES
since 2004-02-01
Posts 3802california |
no one wants to be in the dark yet at times it brings lightness to ones eyes in colors lately red swirls like a hazy fog forming shapes of something else dancing in the darkness of the room interesting read |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Ok...definitely my favorite. Eric |
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froggy Senior Member
since 2003-06-23
Posts 1893Michigan |
Beautifully written. Love this piece. :-) Within this heart you'll find love |
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DavePage Member Elite
since 2003-12-21
Posts 2917 |
Marsha, Eric and Froggy Many thanks for your words. Swirling moved on Nothing and then moved Red or Storm as the relationship ended but it had ended before the storm, it just needed two people to grow up, or maybe just one to learn he had lost. Lightly seems to have taken on a life of it's own. thanks once again Dave |
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