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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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"Here, I wrote a tragedy" I painted my nails pearl just to make this elegant as I underscored the words traveling my finger thus "read with me" as though this was a fact of literature. "Stop looking at my fingernails" I frowned and watched you puzzling (as you had a right to be) as though I'd said "Hey look!" (don't see) what is right before your eyes I want you captivated - damn - but not quite hypnotized. You walk fine-lined insistency "Watch me, Daddy, Oh watch me" diving backwards from the board How many times re-live the scene- did you catch the fall? Water most miraculous cushioning her head you said: "I thought she had more sense than that" cradling the broken neck of your child of dreams... y'see that it was nobody's fault? "baby-baby-baby sweet" rocking you there inbetween the breasts of my complicity smothering your screams I said: "Here, I wrote a tragedy" and painted my nails pearl. |
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LeeJ Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296 |
well, I believe the pearl nails will always and forever outlast anything else...they'll never chip...but sparkle even more brighter with each new day Marvelous writing... |
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Margherita Member Seraphic
since 2003-02-08
Posts 22236Eternity |
What a strongly captivating write! I held my breath! Love, Margherita |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
serenity, Your pearl is the mist of mind and not too kind. But neither is reality. Well done and I enjoyed the read.  |
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Catrina Member
since 2004-11-10
Posts 132 |
You walk fine-lined insistency "Watch me, Daddy, Oh watch me" diving backwards from the board How many times re-live the scene- did you catch the fall? Water most miraculous cushioning her head you said: "I thought she had more sense than that" cradling the broken neck of your child of dreams... ~@~ Someone kicked your muse into gear again. Good! |
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inkedgoddess Member Rara Avis
since 2002-11-19
Posts 7392Ohio |
love the pearls and the theatre upon entry into your imagination and yes, thanks for the challenge on mr. well's poetry which i replied to; i will try my best  |
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Nightshade 
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Geesh....my "Serenity Section" of my library is getting quite full......GLEEEE ! luv you, Chris ~The soul that can speak through the eyes can also kiss with a gaze~ |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Excellent excellent write!! Love ya lady~ |
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Ericc Member Elite
since 2003-01-31
Posts 4178 |
Wow...!!!! Eric |
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Dark Angel Member Patricius
since 1999-08-04
Posts 10095 |
Hi Gorgeous...you wanna share your muse  love you m'lady it's a  as is all your work Mxx into this night i wonder, it's morning that i dread, another day of knowing of, the path i fear to tread. ~Sarah McLachlan~ |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
I don't have much time, but after checking my mail, I thought I should come clarify this one a bit. Since I do write from personal experience at times the confusion is understandable, but while I won't interpret the entire poem here, I wanted to state that the little girl in the poem was just a poetic device of personification, and the backwards dive into the empty pool is a metaphor. (In other words, this is a disclaimer: no children were harmed in the writing of this poem. )And I know, know, I do write about dead people--just not this time.  I apologize for any misunderstanding, and I thank you all kindly for reading. Ta for now good people! |
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*Alli4000*
since 2004-03-21
Posts 3188The World of Poetry |
This is nicely written - enjoyed! ~Alli~ Happy 2005! |
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iliana Member Patricius
since 2003-12-05
Posts 13434USA |
Holy Smokes! Library clipped. And, Sister, if you don't attempt to publish some day, I will be DISAPPOINTED! Love you, jo |
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Paul Wilson
since 2002-07-07
Posts 4711United States |
Serenity...I thought I had this one figured out, till I read your dis-claimer. You are a very complex person at times. Isn't that what daddy's are for, too catch their little girls and protect them. Enjoyed...Paul ~~To share my poems with you is to share my heart with you~~ |
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passing shadows Member Empyrean
since 1999-08-26
Posts 45577displaced |
K...I can't even begin to put my thoughts together here... just know you touched me |
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