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Dark Stranger
Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631
West Coast

0 posted 2005-01-10 07:56 AM



if you wanted to
and knew it was ok
that way would be fine
with no changes

just the you of you
letting it all go
til it broke open
and made pools

where nothing had been


I read behind your eyes
when you were tiptoes
on back stairs
looking in on permission

it was not cold then
but you had the signs
and crossed your arms
pretending there was no hunger

but I knew you hadn't eaten
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Sunshine
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since 1999-06-25
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Listening to every heart
1 posted 2005-01-10 08:50 AM


I read behind your eyes
when you were tiptoes

~*~

She must have known...

nakdthoughts
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since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200
Between the Lines
2 posted 2005-01-10 09:12 AM


I read behind your eyes...

love the line

M

LeeJ
Member Patricius
since 2003-06-19
Posts 13296

3 posted 2005-01-10 09:38 AM


a lovely awareness....

Morning D

Susan
Member Ascendant
since 2004-03-27
Posts 5104
walking the surreal
4 posted 2005-01-10 10:20 AM


your images stir hunger pangs - if she is a kitty, then she has the tools to enter through the window and burgle herself something yummie

Hugs D -  Susan

If I wander far enough, long enough, will I finally know . . .

Susan Caldwell
Member Rara Avis
since 2002-12-27
Posts 8348
Florida
5 posted 2005-01-10 11:26 AM


'it was not cold then
but you had the signs
and crossed your arms
pretending there was no hunger"

lol...

good, you are very good.

"cast me gently into the morning, for the night has been unkind"
~Sarah McLachlan~

*Alli4000*
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The World of Poetry
6 posted 2005-01-10 08:20 PM


Nice one...

~Alli~

Happy 2005!

Martie
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7 posted 2005-01-10 10:29 PM


DS

was not cold then
but you had the signs
and crossed your arms
pretending there was no hunger

but I knew you hadn't eaten
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I think you are perceptive and a damn fine poet!!  

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